TheShadow

@whalekeeper

Lois

The clock turned to five, and some of the students cheered as a tall man stepped up to the podium at the front of the room. He smiled pleasantly and held up a hand to silence them.

“Please, everyone, take a seat. I know you all are very hungry and tired from your travels here, so I will try to make this quick. I am H…[Read more]

@theducktator @whalekeeper @elishavet-pidyon

Lois

Lois turned away from his short interaction with Viktor, to see a teammate go down with a ball to the face. He looked to where the ball came from, and saw Felicity, standing near the front of her team. She winked at him, then threw two more balls in quick succession, one at him and one at Viktor.…[Read more]

“I think the hardest thing about jumping off a bridge would be deciding whether to do a front flip or a back flip.” -my friend’s brother

“Are trees categorically considered plants?”-a coworker

“I’m jealous of my shoes.” -My cousin

“Autism is a spectrum, selfishness is just a thing.” -My dad

My cousin, texting me: “You simpil tun”

Me:…[Read more]

@whalekeeper Hehe I love that

Speaking of funny quotes, I do have some from you…

@ellette-giselle

XD

Dante

The chair moved down the sidewalk a couple yards before slowly rolling to a stop. Dante turned to see Rory’s puzzled expression, and then burst out laughing. Then he doubled over, holding his side.

“Heh, ow, hehe… there’s no way that wasn’t a bit,” he said, barely managing to hold back more laughter. “Seriou…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

XD

Gabriel Mai

“That depends. Right now? No. You don’t have the strength nor the experience. In the future possibly, though I will say, there is yet to be a woman monster hunter where I am from. But if a woman had the will, and the strength to back it up, I guess it could be okay, though women should be protected like children…[Read more]

@keilah-h

lololol. I get that. The Tangled one was me with the Zero Hour: Freedom set.

@whalekeeper

He’d hate her attitude XD, but yes

Gabriel Mai

When the screaming quieted, Gabriel answered. “Pretty much, though I don’t know what a Chee-wa-wa is. Ditching them? I can’t. At the moment, the village I live in has had an increased number of attacks despite the population not growing by a large amount, and a few new varieties of…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

lol, well thanks. I get told I’m crazy or weird all the time. XD

haha. It’s not me always either. But I feel like readers view us as always thinking that. XD

@whalekeeper

Gabriel Mai

Gabriel shook his head. “It isn’t proper for a Protector to share his secret with many people. Besides, if they discovered my birthmarks, the fact I’m the Protector wouldn’t save me. I’ve already been marked as a demon by my previous village, and they’ve all seen the Protector fight at some point or another.” The red…[Read more]

@hybridlore

lol, thanks. XD

@grcr

You are very welcome!!

Okay sounds good.

Okay, for a little more editorial feedback…..

and Emrysrushed

Second to last paragraph, you just need a space there.

And then structurally,

Put your right hand to your chest…”

This seems a little odd, because 1. it is one of the more standard ways of swearing an oath, and 2. as a sol…[Read more]

@grcr

Ooo! This is interesting!!

(I actually thought the dad was gonna die in this chapter from scene 1…. so I’m relieved that he made it. XD)

A few typos I caught, but at this point I’m not sure what sort of feedback you’re looking for, so let me know. This is interesting and I’m eager to keep reading if you post more!

So man y kids… and…[Read more]

@theducktator

lol. No prob. XD

@loopylin

Rory

“Push you? If you’re sure…..” He stared in confusion for several moments. Then, bracing his hands against the back of the chair, he gave it a shove and let go, waiting to see what would happen.