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@keilah-h @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @the_lost-journal @liberty

Okay, here’s the next chapter. Any critiques/thoughts would be appreciated.

Chapter 2

It was quiet. Extraordinarily quiet. The clock did not tick on Elina’s wall, the alarm on her phone did not blare, and her siblings did not come to wake her up. The only noise came from Elina h…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Your welcome, and that would be so cool, it would add even more depth to Huntress and that point in the story.

(why do I write weirdly eloquent things like that? lol)

XD

@keilah-h

Kinda random, but I wasn’t sure where else to ask this cause it technically is a drawing-related question: What did you guys imagine Old Hunter to be like? Did you have a specific appearance in mind for him when you read about him?

I think I imagined him looking like Sniper exactly older and some things off with his appearance like m…[Read more]

@liberty

Thank you!!

@keilah-h

Indeed lol.

@hybridlore

The first three chapters are pretty short because I wasn’t too invested in them lol.

Thank you so much for the critiques, I 100% agree with all of them. I used telling in this specifically because I didn’t know what to write to make it longer, so I’ll try using the suggestions for showi…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @hybridlore @the_lost-journal

Okay, well here’s the first chapter. I’m not a huge fan of it, but the other draft first chapter wasn’t great either. So critiques are definitely appreciated.

Chapter 1

“You ever wondered what it would be like to leave Rosen?”

Elina’s eyebrows shot up, “Why? Do you intend to?”
“I…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Thanks, it’ll be a little creepy, though it’s not the main focus.

@keilah-h

Lol thank you.

@the_lost-journal

🤨

@keilah-h

Cool, lol. I’ll probably have him in the back of my mind now every time I write with my Emmerich XD.

@liberty

Sounds good.

@ellette-giselle

Whoops, thanks for catching the tag lol. Also thanks!

@hybridlore

Thank you!! I might go with Emmerich, it sounds nice.

@anyone

So, one of my characters is named Eldred currently. However, after doing research on his name, it is in fact from medieval English and not German or French, which is what his nationality is (he’s a knight from Terre, a country formed from German and French tribes). If any of you have either German or French medieval name suggestions, that…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

Interesting…

@stephie

Yay, that’s awesome!! Praise God!!

@stephie

That’s wonderful!!

@hybridlore

Yess!! Will look at these later

@hybridlore

Oh my goodness *brings back memories* We used to love that show.  But I don’t remember that line, sadly xD

Finally, someone else who’s watched it!! That is sad, it’s a good line lol. There’s so many good lines from the show XD

@hybridlore

Yeah, as long as you put a TW, I don’t think it matters.

Okay, perfect. First, have to clear out all of the uh… wonderful writing before posting it.

What?? XD

Lol, I was rewatching an episode from Martha Speaks (I don’t care if it’s for kids it’s one of the greatest shows ever), and this line really spoke to me.

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