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@esther-c

Hybrid pointed that out to me too. For this chapter specifically, I wanted it to feel pretty fast paced, specifically when she got to the party. Do you think that worked?

Ah, okay then that makes sense. It did work pretty well, the chapter felt fast paced. Not in a bad way though, it introduced the characters and world efficiently.

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@keilah-h

Lucky, I try to draw stuff fast then end up erasing it aggressively lol.

@linus-smallprint

I had a feeling I needed to hear this. Thank you for the advice, I really do need to listen to it. I’m a bit of a perfectionist so it’s going to be hard to post stuff as it is, but thank you again.

@ellette-giselle

Linus is 💯 correct. Plus, the more you pause the more you lose your flow. For me, I turn off autocorrect and gra…

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@hybridlore

Okay, I’m going to catch up with the rest of the chapters, but chapters 5-6 were good.

@esther-c

This was good, nice job. The only thing I would recommend though is using a bit more body language.

@keilah-h

Nice, it looks really good!!

@esther-c

Please tag me for when you post the chapters, your boards look so good!!

@ellette-giselle

Thank you!! And I totally agree with you, those types of parents are so annoying in fiction (looking at you Disney Channel and YA books).

@linus-smallprint

Thanks, and this is technically the first draft, although I started around Christmas last year but ended up deleting a few of the chapters and rewriting…[Read more]

@keilah-h

It’s a super irrational fear but it’s there. Not that your story is scaring me, I enjoy it.

Lol, thanks, and no judgment on the the irrational fear, we all have them XD. Whenever I’m alone and can’t find anyone in the house I assume they’ve been Thanos snapped or something lol.

@hybridlore

Glad you like it, thanks!

@whalekeeper

Yes, this sounds great!!

@keilah-h @hybridlore

Great, here it is:

Chapter 1

“You ever wondered what it would be like to leave Rosen?” Jack questioned, glancing down at his twin sister.

Elina’s eyebrows shot up, “Why? Do you want to?”
“I don’t know.” Jack replied. “I’ve been thinking about it a lot, though. I mean, it’s kind of weird we can’t leave, what with the wa…[Read more]

@rae @keilah-h

Lol, I would love to read that. I’m cool with my characters leaving.

@keilah-h

 thank you!!!! I might draw him again soon, go into more detail on his face and stuff.

Your welcome, and that would be so cool!! If you post any future art of him please tag me.

@liberty

Here’s my story. It’s a little short, but I hope you enjoy it!

A Summer Star Gaze

“I screwed up, Liam. Hazel hates me now.” Milly hugged her knees and placed her face on them.

Liam sighed, lying on his back and resting his hands on his stomach. Above, the moon illuminated the porch roof the two sat upon, scarce few stars shining aro…[Read more]

@hybridlore @ellette-giselle @linus-smallprint @whalekeeper @the_lost-journal @keilah-h

I rewrote the first chapter with all of your suggestions in mind, do you want me to post it for your thoughts/critiques?

@theducktator

Ducks???👀

Indeed. It’s from one of the episodes of Martha Speaks, and that’s all I’ll say.

@whalekeeper

I’m following along! And I’ll answer any group questions you post; for now, I’ll stay quiet. *Ninja reads*

Yay, glad to hear that!!

@ellette-giselle

i am so relieved Jack is still there!! Also, I have a feeling I’m going to like Dylan.
just a hunch.

I hope you like Dylan too, he’s probably my second favorite character to write.

also, I’m not sure about Olivia and Adaline’s reaction. You see, when people bully others it tends to be because of insecurity and cowardice. I have…

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@keilah-h

Old Hunter is based off a copperhead snake! He has a scar cutting under his right eye, across his nose, and then just stopping over his left one, and probably a couple smaller scars on the left side of his face. I tried to make him look Sniper-like but still be his own character. I also really like the camo pattern I gave his…

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@hybridlore

Some things I’d really like to hear from y’all are scene ideas. I’m planning to go back and extend a lot of the earlier chapters (at least 1-6) because I didn’t have the same word count goal for them as I do now. So if you have any ideas for scenes that would fit into those (or future scenes) I would love to hear them. So far I have…

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