Miriam K.

@liberty @keilah-h @theducktator @hybridlore

Ok! So I’m not posting this as soon as I wanted, lol, but this is the almost final draft and I’d like your thoughts again if y’all are willing.

I didn’t change any of the tenses or add words because I wanted it to sound very “in the moment” if that makes sense. I did add a couple of things that hopefu…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

tbh, I am also confused about the teachings  XD And I do wonder why. But also I get this feeling of fullness after going to confession. So whatever it is, I think I am going to stick to it! Also  thanks for the prayers. I won’t be able to get back to anyone for a while btw. I AM GOING SKIING! ^o^

I agree, it does help to tell oth…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

okay hahahaha sounds good lol

@whalekeeper

no I haven’t!!!

Doesn’t everyone have at least a fragment of virtue though? (Sorry, I don’t mean to shut down everything you’re saying, this is just my thoughts. 😅) I’m not saying they have to be someone that the readers will look up to and be like, “Oh my word I want to be just like them.” I understand mankind is sinful and there probably are people out there t…

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@esther-c

Now, you mentioned your characters not knowing God. And I liked how you put that—“without God there is no hope.” But…you have to think that these characters are probably looking for hope, right? Even just an occasional thought of wishing there was a way out of this darkness they’re living in.

So I know with where they’re at right now,…

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@grcr

LOL I love these parts. 💛💛

Aww, thanks! 🥰 Me too 🤪

Would you want to write this differently… ? before I saw the “she drew out her name” part, my mind read it that she spelled it out. (Maybe I’m just crazy…?)

I don’t knowww 😭 I’ve seen it written like that in books before, but I feel like if I changed it to italics it would carry a differe…[Read more]

Bro, I was literally like smashing the submit button and it took forever for that response to post 🤦🏻‍♀️🤣

@savannah_grace2009

My story is not a lighthearted, hopeful story, at least in the beginning. Right now it’s supposed to be “depressing” and dark. Honestly, to add sprinkles of hope in wouldn’t work for what’s going to happen in the next few chapters. Because right now, none of my characters know God, and so without God there is no hope. I want to…

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@esther-c

I also hope I didn’t come across as rude or brushing you off…I really do appreciate your thoughts because that means I need to work on foreshadowing! And explaining my book to others helps me flesh out my thoughts a little more! Thank you so much! <3

@esther-c

Ok, so the biggest thing I noticed was the lack of hope throughout the story. The characters seemed to think about death a lot and were put through a lot of physical pain. There’s nothing inherently wrong with that, but it needs to be balanced out with hope. When I got to read those Lilitu/Sef memories from when they were little, that w…

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@theducktator

*gasp* It’s a date!

Yes!! 🤭 In my first draft I actually never wrote a scene of their first study sesh together…do you think I should add that in for the second draft??

When what, Tyler? 👀 I want to know…

I would like to know as well… 🤣

Definitely left that open for the imagination or a future short story &#x1f44…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Ok, so I told you I’d finish reading your book by the end of February, and I did! But I only started like two days ago. 🤣 Here are my thoughts! (Excuse any typos, I was doing this in the car, lol!)

Ok, so the biggest thing I noticed was the lack of hope throughout the story. The characters seemed to think about death a lot…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Haha, so true though 😂😂

@whalekeeper

Ahh, I gotcha. Well I’m glad he’s doing well!!

I have yet to ask him what he thinks about all this… My brother is the kind of guy who shrugs and asks if he can have ice cream for every meal at the hospital. 😂😭 I remember as a little kid, I wanted to have a surgery so I could have extra treats.

I get that, my brother would proba…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

hm, my church is definitely not corrupted! All the people there truly care and want to give people a god church experience to make them care about church. And we do try to get people into the church, but that is us just following the mission of Jesus and being fishers of men! Like most churches just stay in their own community…

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@theducktator

No worries! : )

Yeah, definitely. We follow the exact liturgy every week, with hymns interspersed, and a reading from the OT, the Psalms, an Epistle, and a Gospel, and Communion.

Ok cool! So you do Communion every week?

I usually wear a dress or skirt, as do many of the women. Pretty much everyone in our church dresses up, except…

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@whalekeeper

Praise the Lord! That’s awesome to hear!!

Is he in pain because of it?? Or is he doing okay?

I might be able to make it! 🤞 We’ll see—I have some stuff to do that day

@savannah_grace2009

I guess we could have them meet up in the hall on the way to class. 🤷🏻‍♀️ Idek when the school dance is anymore. XDXD