FIREQUACKER

@esther-c

Sorry I’m just now getting to this!!!!

My main critique would be that you spend a lot of time on dialogue. I kind of feel like we just got thrown into the story and all we know about the characters is because of what they say. Maybe breaking up some dialogue and really showing us who they characters are would help…it kind of feels l…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Poor Highscribe. What did you do to her?

@ellette-giselle

Leon is definitely more confident and the leader. It feels like Julian looks to him and gets more concerned about things. And Julian likes to make quips. That was just what I think I noticed from this chapter.

@liberty @keilah-h @theducktator @hybridlore

Ok! So I’m not posting this as soon as I wanted, lol, but this is the almost final draft and I’d like your thoughts again if y’all are willing.

I didn’t change any of the tenses or add words because I wanted it to sound very “in the moment” if that makes sense. I did add a couple of things that hopefu…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

He’s my favorite so I want him to die.

No wonder you kill off so many characters. 😅

🖋️Official KP Psychopath✒️

Lolol

@ellette-giselle

Good section!

Roland, I in no way want to go against God’s will, but are you sure?” Leon asked.

Roland nodded.

When I read this, I thought that maybe Leon and Julian should have prayed about it before letting him come with them.

Roland shook his head in disgust. “I have a mind to smash it,” he muttered.

“Whoa, whoa, whoa,” Le…

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@ellette-giselle

That’s not his only chapter, just the next one when he appears… I think.

He also needs to die.

That sounds contradictory, lol.

@ellette-giselle

Thanks!! I’m glad it’s working, I honestly don’t even know what I did lol. Warrain is based a lot on Overwatch, which I’ve played a lot before, so maybe it’s coming from experience and that’s how. (It’s still a very different game though.)

I sure like Cole.

When’s Alec coming back? he was my favorite!! *puppy whimper*

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@loopylin @koshka

Rax and Ben

Rax was excited when he heard Eddie’s response. “Great! Wonderful!” You could never see a smile as big on anyone’s face as on Rax’s. He was filled with joy, for he liked dancing, even though he had only danced formally once or twice, but that made him more excited that he would dance formally again. And to top it…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

I wrote it seriously, but looking back at it it’s kinda funny, lol. I’m glad you found it funny

@raxforge

Lolll, funny, but legit too

@koshka Sylph is very cute, by the way. I want to know how he dances.

I seriously need to update the foreign lit/etc. class, since it’s my character teaching the class. Posting this reminder for myself, so maybe I get it written tonight.

@elishavet-pidyon Umm… I think I just tried to tag you by your CWW name…? 😅

@whalekeeper

Great topic!

I don’t know, I’m sure they affect my writing a lot more than I realize. The one that has the most is obviously reading but I don’t know if that counts. XD

A lot of my projects for a while had something to do with space and flying starships, because I read Skyward by Brandon Sanderson and loved it. I guess that’s an…[Read more]

@koshka

By the way, Syph has no problem dancing with girls. He just is trying to understand how it would work if you weren’t in competition.

Syph is so funny, lol

@the_lost-journal

tbh, I am also confused about the teachings  XD And I do wonder why. But also I get this feeling of fullness after going to confession. So whatever it is, I think I am going to stick to it! Also  thanks for the prayers. I won’t be able to get back to anyone for a while btw. I AM GOING SKIING! ^o^

I agree, it does help to tell oth…[Read more]

@loppylin @anyoneelse

Also, I don’t think I remember what your characters look like either?

Here’s a pre-written description of Rax:

Rax was a tall, tan skinned man. His eyes were light blue, filled with emotion. He had long grey hair often tied into a manbun. His clothes were baggy, pants and shirt, but he wore no shoes. On his arms were t…

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I like fire, so I have a MC who is a pyromancer :}

*blinks a couple of times* … *blinks a couple more times*

I had to go so far to try and find the last Sypher and Twins RPs XD. I guess that’s what I get for not being on for almost a week (I should probably read up on what Alpha and Dante are doing since there seems to be a lot of noise coming from over there… 👀👀👀)

@loopylin @koshka

Rax and…[Read more]