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@linus-smallprint

Awesome! Thank you so much! That was something I really tried to pay attention to, because I come from a Christian family and I’ve never known a time where my parents didn’t know God… so it’s something I have to think about, how someone who’s never been exposed to this kind of thing would react to it. If you or anyone else has…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Okay, I am caught up now.

I see you already saw some of my comments. I like where this is going and I think Sara’s reaction to the underground church makes sense. You have good attention to detail as you write.

Out of curiosity, what draft number is this? I doubt it is the first.

Looking forward to the next chapters!

@whalekeeper

👍

@theducktator

Thank you for your support! I’m still working on trying to piece everything together, but I do think I want to include that scene in some way.

@theducktator

Your welcome!

I might wait until you are 18 for Mistborn. But yeah, check with your friends as well.

@ellette-giselle

yeah…. If I wanna risk seeing porn worthy covers when I open it.

Ewww… Yup, that’s a very good reason to avoid that.

(until those were taken down for being politically offensive)

Taken down for being politically offensive? Or was there perhaps another reason. One the Librarians don’t want you to know. Hmm…

@theshadow

Ah. I thought it might be the first draft.

Can I give you some advice?

From what I can tell about the way you write, you seem to have trouble getting through your progects. My advice to you is common for first drafts. Don’t worry about rewriting anything. Just power through, and keep writing without looking back. There is going to be…[Read more]

@loopylin

Alpha

Alpha chuckled. “Honestly, not much else. I’ve been bored out of my mind, hence playing with the knife.” Alpha’s hand glowed and he made the knife travel around the room before hovering over his shoulder again. “From getting stabbed in the lung to not having anything to do, life is crazy,” Alpha commented with a sigh, making his…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Thanks!!! ☺️

@smiley @keilah-h @theshadow

Thank you ladies! Sure thing!!

@theducktator

Wait really?? Oh I didn’t even notice! Maybe I’ll have to read the book now 😝

@raxforge (you haven’t read this one yet) @ellette-giselle @whalekeeper @keilah-h @hybridlore

So, I haven’t finished this one yet, but it’s getting long so I’m gonna post it in two parts.

Also, I posted a section of this story above, and I will be making that section bold so that those who already read it can skip with ease.

With that, i…[Read more]

@keilah-h

I just realized that the reply I wrote for you didn’t post. Sorry.

He caught pneumonia, at least, that’s what I wrote his symptoms to fit, I never officially name it in the story.

@highscribeofaetherium oooh I didn’t know this was a thing! As soon as you’re done with Ellette’s, can I ask you for a character?

@linus-smallprint

Awesome! Thanks so much for reading it! I’m looking forward to hearing what you think of the rest of it.

Good point, I hadn’t noticed that, but it totally makes sense. I’m planning to rewrite the first chapter anyway, so I’ll try to take that into account when I do.

Wow, that’s terrible. That kind of thing hasn’t happened to…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I have no problem throwing a book across the room. (I did that once. Right off the top of the bunk bed and into the bedside trash. I was proud of that shot) but it’s sad when you’ve spent money on the book, so thanks for saving me that for several of these. 🙃

Your welcome!

Do you have access to any audiobook library? That’s oft…[Read more]

@anybody who wants to see but @theshadow specifically

here’s a quick sketch I did of Old Hunter’s face!

@esther-c all righty!

@hybridlore

Up to the 6th chapter. Liking it so far. It looks like your opening is well-structured for the most part. I feel drawn in and can feel the tension. Sara finding the religion stuff interesting when others seem to think it boring or not worth their time makes her a character I want to follow.

One thing. From the opening scene, I was…[Read more]

@esther-c cool!! I’ll totally read it, if only for fun! Might pick out a couple of grammar mistakes here and there or tell you if  there’s a better way for a sentence to flow, but other than that I don’t think I’ll be critiquing much.

@elishavet-pidyon

Narnia was the first thing we seriously made up fanfics for that I remember. It was bonkers, but fun.

yesss early fanfics are always bonkers.

My first fanfic was a wacky Star Wars one where all the characters from the original trilogy rented a yacht and sailed around this one planet….?

@ellette-giselle well, I’ll be here if you ever need to talk about family drama. My dad’s family is nowhere near as bad as yours from what I can tell, but they can be really dramatic, so I totally understand.