Stepheroni and Cheese

A fantasy book telling the reader not to read fantasy books would be hypocritical.

I think a lot of this can be simplified through common sense. Were these books meant to be imitated? Were they portraying real sorcery positively, or just using for an obviously fantastical story? If Alan (or even better, his parents, since he was young and easily…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Thank you!

@whalekeeper @keilah-h @theshadow @esther-c @freed_and_redeemed @grcr

I might add someone else later, but for now I’m just doing one.

Ayla (I haven’t given her a last name yet)

Age: 15

Species: Human

Appearance: Ayla is 5′ 7”, with pale skin, thick wavy dark brown hair, dark brown eyes, and high cheekbones. She is slender, and typically…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Yeah, thanks!! I hope it stands up to my claims when I write it! 😝

@mineralizedwritings

Really?? That’s so cool! I can’t imagine how that must feel.

It’s a weird feeling, but it’s not distracting me from the rest of the project. I know a lot of people have their ending planned out, but get over-obsessed and never plan how to get there XDXD But this ending literally depends on how the rest of the story plays o…[Read more]

@loopylin @mineralizedwritings @savannah_grace2009 @rae @freed_and_redeemed @anyone

I am so happy right now guys 👀 I found the perfect ending to my project. Like, I just can’t right now. And I won’t say what it is because the joy is in the foreshadowed surprise, but aagh – and it came from my plot board!! All I had to do was look at what was s…[Read more]

How do you guys want to start this? Maybe the new characters want to secure their own areas in the castle? I’m not sure what kind of conflicts have popped up before this. XD

You know what? Fine, here goes nothing XD I need a distraction from senioritis.

Commissioner Barnes (Only gives her first name to friends)

Age: 35

Species/ethnicity: Staunchly human; from an isolated city in an alternative sci-fi Earth. If she was from normal Earth, she would be German. (I did not pick her because of this, I promise…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I agree with Whaley…I need to step away too.

@highscribeofaetherium

I guess Natalie’s not good at stabbing?😂 And since he’s a real person, my mom wouldn’t let me kill him.

@highscribeofaetherium @grcr

Here’s a scene from the end of Chapter 1:

The ducks flew off to meet the rebellion. First they dropped glitter bombs, before flying down. The rebels fled at the onslaught of glitter, all except for The Dope, who attacked Natalie. However, she was ready for him. She flew just out of his reach, darting down and stabbing…

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@linus-smallprint

I’ve been very busy the past few weeks. Sorry it took me so long to show up here. *hands you spinach ice cream* Anyway, I started your story, and I’m really enjoying it!

@ellette-giselle

You’re good, it’s just preference 🙂

@linus-smallprint

I’m an Outliner as far as what I want the story to look like, the conflict, the rough points, etc. Some stuff comes while writing. So, a confident 7/10ths of an Outliner. XD

@ellette-giselle

I think it’s a good idea if I step away from critiquing LTBL. We probably don’t have the same preferences in writing, and I won’t be able to help you if I’m not on the same plane of thought 😅 Good luck with this draft!

You know you’re a writer when you hear a particularly beautiful line in a song and think about it for hours.

Y’all, I feel mean critiquing 😅😕 I should post a short story so you two (Ellette, Sara) can rip me to shreds.

I’m completely serious. I just need to think of a good short story prompt. *Searches online*

@ellette-giselle

I will NEVER start a book without a specific goal in mind. I had the end before I had the beginning. There is a certain amount of graphing that I do before every story, and you can be sure that all things will tie into the end of this book, or the plot of the next. I most certainly did outline my book. I’m sorry if you can’t see…

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@whalekeeper

HOW DO YOU DO THAT?!??!?!

Wow it’s like you can read my mind lol!

Anyways….

@ellette-giselle

I totally agree with what Whaley said.

The time jumps just take away so much from the story (even at the beginning where Aaron and Turin were working together) and it makes me lose interest. You do great at describing outside of the…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @ellette-giselle
I can try XD
I think the focus needs to be waaay deeper. The writing is very much outside the characters’ perspective, and only tells the bare points of the story. So the orphanage endeavor feels random.
To compare it to something, the perspective is like a bird high in the sky. Everything below looks like doll…[Read more]