Brianne

@jonas @highscribeofaetherium @savannah_grace2009

What are y’all’s thoughts on my depiction of Thing?

@euodia-vision

Thats all I have for now, thanks! I will check it out and see what I can come up with 🙂

@rae

Ok, first, before all the cool stuff, I’ll introduce the standard Shome’el sword and shield:

There isn’t much to say about the sword, but I like the design. As for the shield (front and side profile) It is designed with a curved body, that forms a kind of pseudo roof. This is because of the nature of Omialia being in a space of…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium @jonas

I that’s how I did it actually now checking the original document:

You’re telling me. I had more questions, but held my tongue because Thing’s current track record hasn’t been the most helpful for answering them, other than explaining my inability to eat.

Thanks Jonas for explaining what made sense in my head, but c…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Aw, thanks!

@trailblazer

Wow, your posts are great! I only read one but you’re very talented!!

@jonas

A fair concern. Despite his reputation, Sanderson has left his readers on edge for extended periods of time with little word, take The Rithmatist for example. That being said, that was more of a side project that he’s simply been putting off, whereas Stormlight is one of his biggest series, and he’s far more invested. Knowing him, I would…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

It’s so hard to just pick one main character out of the set of five, though! I love all them equally!!! XD

That’s fair. I think you can make it work as well, it is harder for smaller stories though, but not impossible.

This is funny, to me it feels like they’re my best friends and if I choose one over the other they’ll get m…

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@jonas

Okay, that’s kind of what I was thinking. I don’t know if it needs to be clearer or not. I don’t know how many other people would notice, and I already had a guess as to why. So maybe rewording it slightly would clear things up.

Ok, fair enough, I’ll tweak it then.

If you’re attached to it, I don’t think it needs to change at any point. It…

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@freedomwriter76 @anyone

CONTINUED FROM EARLIER…

Two elves bore Alpha upon a stretcher into a cell, where Grathmere was held. Carefully, they set him down, and exited the cell. Alpha glanced at his father before staring at ceiling of an unidentifiable type of stone.

Grathmere was in his normal elven like form, with fiery eyes and ashen skin.…

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@jonas

You might not care, but I try to maintain a fairly equal ratio of male MCs to female MCs in a book. This shouldn’t be the deciding factor, but consider that adding Liv as a MC would give you a 2 to 4 ratio (double the amount of female characters to male), whereas you currently have as even a ratio as possible with 2 to 3.

Obviously, you m…

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@freedomwriter76

Oof, sounds pretty sad to me…poor siblings 🥺 (sounds pretty angsty XD)

From what I’ve read, your book seems really interesting!! 💕🤩

Well that scene was from an old story, which gave me the idea to write my current WIP based off of that. So it didn’t make it through editing, neither did most of that very sloppy 41K very rough “dr…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

NOOOOOOOOO!!!!!

**Me dying inside cuz I spent an hour typing the end of Grathmere’s story and it wouldn’t post**

Anyway, attempt NO. 2 shall appear soon, just give me another hour…**groans**

@freedomwriter76

Ooh, I’m intrigued!!

@thearcaneaxiom

Actually, I haven’t yet! I make mental note of that. Thanks!

@jonas

Ok, I actually didn’t know that it would be different characters, but it makes sense. Sanderson likes exploring the different eras.

@rae

Cool! That’s a really cool concept. Crystal swords as an idea has always felt a little fantasy cliché to me, but the mechanic you built into it is actually really intriguing! It’s kind of like a memory metal (is that what it’s based off of), but it disappears instead of getting distorted, so that’s a really powerful material. Just make sure…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @anyone

THE CONCLUSION OF GRATHMERE…

His son, his only living son, lay dying in his arms. So powerful was he, but he could not even save his son. A slit of red appeared under Alpha’s black lashes, his eyes were slightly open.

“You did this. It was your people, your allies who have done this.” The once strong voice of Alpha had…

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@savannah_grace2009

Yeah, I agree with the majority of what Jonas already said. Although I think smaller stories can have many prospective, but it has to be done right. I could think of a few examples, though most are more contemporary, but I’m sure there’s many fantastical. I think a cast of 5 or 6 is a fair enough amount that won’t be…[Read more]