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Esther replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 16 hours, 33 minutes ago
Awwww!!!
But in six months he’s moving to Florida for college…..😭😭
At least I have a little brother <333 I love him to DEATH…I literally love him so muchhhh
That is so funny that your MC is named Hallie because (I know I’ve told you this before but Imma say it again hahaha) my little sister’s name is Hallie!!! so it’s just…
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Esther replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 3 days, 15 hours ago
@savannah_grace2009 @theducktator @grcr @smiley @keilah-h @theshadow
Chapter 1
“Why is it so hot?” Hallie Woodbury tucked a loose strand of ginger hair behind her ear.
“I only have two words that can answer that question: New. Mexico.” Easton straightened and tossed his light brown locks off his forehead with a quick shake of his head.…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 days, 11 hours ago
Thanks!!! ☺️
Thank you ladies! Sure thing!!
Wait really?? Oh I didn’t even notice! Maybe I’ll have to read the book now 😝
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The Most Esteemed Feathered One replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 4 days, 14 hours ago
I just read Cinder! I really enjoyed it, though it was a little predictable at times. I guessed Cinder was the Princess Selene as soon as Selene was mentioned. XD I loved Peony so much…why did she have to die???😢 I really like the doctor too, but I’m scared he’ll die too. My favorites usually do. I’m reading Scarlet now. I read Gone…[Read more]
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Esther started the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 5 days, 14 hours ago
Hey everyone!! So my lovely beta-reader (@hybridlore ) was so awesome in giving me feedback on the first draft of an older WIP (this was the one I had asked for help with a little while back). I’m planning to start digging into the editing phase this week and hopefully have the second draft finished sometime in March (we’ll see… sometimes life…[Read more]
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whaley started the topic Topic of the Week…? in the forum General Writing Discussions 5 days, 15 hours ago
So, Topic of the Week! Do we want to start it up again somehow? Please discuss here – if you want it to come back, or if you have any strong opinions about how it should be revitalized.
I’m hesitant to take Kathleen’s job. However, I have plenty of ideas of my own, and would be delighted to do it myself. If this becomes the game plan, I am eager…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Talking about are Fanfics in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 week ago
@smiley wowwww that was great!!
And also I had a thought and now I can’t help but cry a little, it started with where this series would be during the blip but then I kind of thought that Thanos and the Christian elements didn’t really blend so instead I’m working on a different idea (would love to hear any thoughts if yall have them) but basic…
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Liberty replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 week, 6 days ago
@hybridlore @ellette-giselle @raxforge @esther-c @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @theshadow @keilah-h
The others:@power @calyhuge @whalekeeper @theducktator @elishavet-pidyon @the_lost-journal @trailblazer @jonas @beth-torres @euodia-vision @thearcaneaxiom @smiley @freed_and_redeemed @loopylin @felicity @savannah_grace2009 @koshka
Please pard…[Read more]
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Kefa replied to the topic The potato army WIP. in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 weeks, 2 days ago
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freedom started the topic ⚔️Fantasy WIP⚔️ in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 weeks, 3 days ago
@rae @savannah_grace2009 @godlyfantasy12 @kyronthearcanin @lightoverdarkness6 @mineralizedwritings @loopylin @theloonyone @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @queen_of_alvastia @gwyndalf-the-wise @thearcaneaxiom @princesachronicle22 @esther-c @keilah-h @ellette-giselle @theducktator @smiley @highscribeofaetherium @grcr @trailblazer @acancello @godlyfantasy12…[Read more]
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SLAYING SARAAAA ✨✨ replied to the topic Denomination Q and A in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 2 weeks, 4 days ago
AHHH GIRL THE CHOSENNNN
I just restarted watching it and I just finished the first episode of Season Three!!!
it’s so good….Matthew is my FAVORITE!
He’s so sweet and he makes me wanna cry…I love him so much <3
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Trailblazer replied to the topic Denomination Q and A in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 2 weeks, 5 days ago
yeah I threw in the chosen thing just to give a mini heart attack to everyone reading 😂😂
Yeah you got me too lol
I haven’t actually watched the Chosen… I’ve heard a lot of good things about it but never took the time to actually sit down and watch.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Denomination Q and A in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 2 weeks, 6 days ago
yeah I threw in the chosen thing just to give a mini heart attack to everyone reading 😂😂
I sure had one.
Terrible person.
😂😂 lololol. jkjk
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Kefa replied to the topic Denomination Q and A in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 2 weeks, 6 days ago
Okay so I’m going to be completely honest, I have no idea what a sacrament is (probably should have said that to begin with😅)
Oh, it is fine lol, there are plenty of people who don’t know what a sacrament is!
yeah I threw in the chosen thing just to give a mini heart attack to everyone reading 😂😂
Trust me, it worked! Also I love using t…[Read more]
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Kefa replied to the topic Denomination Q and A in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 2 weeks, 6 days ago
Hey, thanks for replying!
So me and my family decided to stop reading our Bibles and just watch the chosen because it’s more entertaining
jk
My jaw dropped when I read that, then I saw the JK 😂😂😂 I was so scared. My honest reaction was “No, that is not good!” LOL
we lean more towards that spiritual gifts still exists and I put my hands u…
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Esther posted an update 2 weeks, 6 days ago
Ok, I’m tagging a lot of people for this, but don’t feel obligated to reply.
So, I’ve gotten stuck in my current WIP, but as I work through that slowly, I want to return to an older WIP that I worked on over the summer and really want to refine. It’s only in a first draft, but I’d like to have a critique partner for it.
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Liberty replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 weeks, 6 days ago
Participants/potential participants:
@hybridlore @ellette-giselle @raxforge @esther-c @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @theshadow @keilah-h
The others:@power @calyhuge @whalekeeper @theducktator @elishavet-pidyon @the_lost-journal @trailblazer @jonas @beth-torres @euodia-vision @thearcaneaxiom @smiley @freed_and_redeemed @loopylin @felicity @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @godlyfantasy12 @rae @ellette-giselle @mineralizedwritings @theducktator @smiley @keilah-h @savannah_grace2009 @anyone-else-idk
Snippet of a future probable scene for The Bois’ book
(and I promise Leo isn’t usually this harsh. He’s just going through a lot when this scene takes place and running off of very little…[Read more]
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freedom replied to the topic Mood Boards/Aesthetics in the forum Characters 3 weeks, 1 day ago
@ellette-giselle Thank you! :3
AND AHHHHH I CAN’T WAIT TO HEAR WHAT YOU THINK OF IT😭✨
The second oldest is Joshua 😉 Jakob is the one in the middle who ends up marrying Angelina (Riker’s sister). (From left to right they are: Leo, Joshua, Jakob, Reuben (Reuben is @mineralizedwritings‘s tho💜😂), and Wolfgang)
I’ll be sure to tag you!…[Read more]
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freedom replied to the topic Mood Boards/Aesthetics in the forum Characters 3 weeks, 1 day ago
@koshka @elishavet-pidyon @godlyfantasy12 (I think you’ll wanna see this😜) @rae @ellette-giselle @mineralizedwritings @theducktator @smiley @keilah-h @savannah_grace2009 @anyone-else-idk
✨The Bois Aesthetic/Moodboard✨
Also consider this my announcement that, though it’s not my main main project, I have officially began drafting The Bois’…[Read more]
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Actually, I’mma remake the moodboards, hehehe. So they shall be revealed later this week. :PP
@esther-c
I replied but didn’t tag you. Not sure if you got it.
I would be willing to try and help with this. You know my views on Romance are rather different than norm, and I believe highschool romantic relationships aren’t healthy. But I’m willing to give it a shot.
I also do edit. I’m not a line-by-line editor, but I have worked as a plot/character/story editor before.
We do have different beliefs on…[Read more]
I appreciate the offer!! Truly!
But like you said, we might not work super well together because of our different viewpoints. So yeah, right now I’d say no, but I will keep you in mind! :))
No problem! I can be your last resort if no one else offers. 😉
Sounds good. 😉 Let me know if you want to be tagged when I post the chapters on here some time! :))
Mm. Sounds interesting, but I’m totally unqualified. I don’t think I’d be able to help much… Sorry… 😅😑
Hey no worries! 🤗
I’m sorry, I don’t think I can help you 🙁
That’s totally fine, girl! ☺️
I’m definitely interested in reading your novel, but I’ve read almost no YA, so I wouldn’t be much help.
No worries! I’ll be sure to tag you tho when I start sharing it on here!!
Awesome! 🙂
@esther-c I would love to help! This went into my spam for some reason, so I’m sorry I didn’t get back to you. Are you still looking for someone?
Actually…I think you might be perfect. You gave some great feedback on my short story, so I’m sure you could do the same for my novel! :))
I’ll PM you later this week with more details and the link to the doc. Thank you so much!!! 🤗
Awesome! I love family and sibling dynamics, and I also read a good amount of YA, so this seems right up my alley! (Although I won’t be able to help much with the 90s references, haha.)
Do you still have my email from the short story critique?
Yay yay!! (Oh I know, right?? I’ve asked my parents and some other older writers I’ve met through KDWC, and even though they gave me a lot to use [plus Google, lol], there’s still something difficult about getting it right since I didn’t live then 🤪)
Yes I believe so!
@esther-c Yeah, that totally makes sense! I was gonna say, ask your parents xD. But I’m sure it’s still difficult.
Great!! 😄
I may have to get some YA recs from you sometime, because I struggle to find clean fiction that I would actually enjoy 😭
Oh definitely! I’m sure I can come up with a list. Middle grade stuff can be great if it’s well done, because content is so much better. 😉
@hybridlore
Please tag me if you post recommendations! I want to read YA, but it’s usually filthy and cringe.
For sure!! Until you come across that one middle school relationship that somehow works out perfectly. 😂
Ok for some reason even though I still see your comments on the short story doc, it won’t let me view your email. 😅 Could you share that again with me so I can share the other doc?? I’ll tell you as soon as I see it if you don’t want to leave your email up.
Awesome! Tysm!! I’ll probably send you the doc tomorrow since I need to make a few notes on it first. :))
Ok I added you to the document! You should get an email about it I believe. (:
Hoo boy. I’d love to, but uhhhh…I wouldn’t be any help. I’m a terrible critiquer and my romance experience is practically nil. You would probably help me more than I help you….sorry!
Funny enough though, my own romance work (a fanfic) took place in 1970 in New Mexico. What are the odds?
Ahh, no problem! :))
No way! That’s so cool! XD
Yeah it was just a consequence of how the original story was set up, but it’s funny to think about.
I doubt your characters will experience anything even close to mine though lol
Oh dear, was it a Star Wars fanfic?? In that case, I hope my charries aren’t handling the types of weapons they use. 🤣
No, it was something else, but yeah there were a lot of weapons involved XD
My Star Wars fanfics don’t really cross over into our world. Yet.
Though I suppose in a fanfic, you could do whatever 🤷🏻♀️
Oh duhhhh 🤦🏻♀️ I’ve watched like all the Star Wars movies, I should know they don’t take place on earth 🤣
lolllll no biggie.