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@savannah_grace2009

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Aw that makes me so happy that you like it 🥹 Well uh yeah…. I am still writing it… but uh… I’m at a pause right now because my mom is editing it and we’ve taken a pretty long break lol… we plan to start back on it again soon and I’ve been trying to work on it here and there…. But idk.

I can resend you the link but I have…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I want to get to this eventually! I’m trying to finish a 1,300 page book right now so I’m trying not to read too much else until I do that. XD But I’m still subscribed to this. <3

@savannah_grace2009

Oh good, I’m glad Cass isn’t playing her. That was just horrible before.

So, since Cass is the perfect child (in Lilitu’s mind, I’d really like to see him fail in areas. Maybe in a way that Lilitu doesn’t even notice but the reader does. Ya know? Just my thoughts)

I liked this chapter a lot. Good job. One thing:

Liv had…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Ah. That is very good news!

also, do still tag me!! I still am reading your story, I just don’t usually have a lot to say though cuz I’m a bad editor. But I am still reading. 😊

@savannah_grace2009

Wonderful! Tag me when you do!

@savannah_grace2009

Not at all. Tag me whenever you want.

This is a really good chapter. Well balanced dialogue, not cheesy on the emotions, but enough to make you feel them. Well done.

(I’m really hoping for more Eloy in this draft. *hint hint*)

@savannah_grace2009

Ok, I read the part, and I think it’s a good introduction to Lilitu. I don’t know if you want critiques, so try I’ll keep it at a minimum.

First of all, I don’t know if you had planned for Lilitu to have any more lasting injuries than some cuts and bruises, but from the level of beating he’s just received, he’s likely to have…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 Yeah, I know! It was crazy, I would only be able to do like four drafts before I’m like “Eh, let’s just publish this already” lol.

@savannah_grace2009

Yay, another section! I’ll read it after Christmas, cuz that’s probably when I’ll have time.

@savannah_grace2009 that’s cool!!

And hey, redrafting can be fun, reading through your story and thinking “oh, I gotta change that” or “what if I switch around these two scenes? It might flow better that way” or “let me change up this character’s role…..”

Except if you do too much. I read a comic recently that had 27 drafts before its final…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 I love this one too! I’m assuming the story, or at least the beginning, has changed a lot from previous drafts. It’s going in a good direction!

@savannah_grace2009

Thank you!!

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@savannah_grace2009

I’m so glad to hear that!

@savannah_grace2009

It’s good! definitely a better place to start. I like it, and I like the way your characters seem better shaped.

Keep it up!

@liberty @ellette-giselle @whalekeeper @savannah_grace2009 @theducktator @esther-c @everyone-else

I signed up!!

@savannah_grace2009

Oh my goodness, Sef and Lilitu kissed!😃 I’m so happy! Poor Neveah though. 🙁 I do think it makes more sense to start the story here then when she was four.

@calyhuge

 Sorry no I have tournaments that week I think

Thanks for letting me know! What kind of tournaments?

@esther-c

YES!!!! I’m so glad you’re participating!

@savannah_grace2009

I know! I’m so excited, too!

@savannah_grace2009

Thank you so much, I didn’t think it would have that impact. While I was writing it I was wondering the whole time if people would understand it XD