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Esther replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
I haven’t started it yet, but I will have read all of it by the end of February. Once I read it all, I’ll give you my overall impression and thoughts! :))
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Okay. Don’t worry, I didn’t think she had become is is on the path to becoming a Pythonos at this point.
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Didn’t Sef turn herself in so they wouldn’t take her mother instead?
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
I haven’t gotten any further, sorry. It slipped my mind, and then school hit and I don’t have much time each week. You can keep tagging me though, and I’ll read more whenever I get more time.
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Sorry, I made it up to where Sef turns herself into the Pythonos and they mark her, but haven’t touched it for a while and keep on forgetting to do so. I’ll try to read more soon!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Thank you.
It was someone I didn’t know, but there’s still a lot of craziness. We’re leaving for Idaho on Saturday, so you can guess it’s a little hectic. 😉
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
We had a death in the family and I’m super busy, but I’ll see what I can do.
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-GRCR- replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Yup yup. I was actually thinking about it yesterday. A little busy right now, but I planned to read and catch up very soon. 😉😁
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The Ducktator replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
I haven’t started it yet, but I will later this week. Maybe tomorrow, since I’m probably too sick for co-op.
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whaley replied to the topic First Draft Blues in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
As long as you love it and it contains a piece of your heart, that’s all that matters. <3
I’m not sure how to feel about this. I feel more as if I’m trying to put my heart into it, and I haven’t found the way to express it in writing format. But thanks for the encouragement. 😁
If this were the case, then w…
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Esther posted an update 1 year, 2 months ago
Ok, I’m tagging a lot of people for this, but don’t feel obligated to reply.
So, I’ve gotten stuck in my current WIP, but as I work through that slowly, I want to return to an older WIP that I worked on over the summer and really want to refine. It’s only in a first draft, but I’d like to have a critique partner for it.
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Liberty replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Participants/potential participants:
@hybridlore @ellette-giselle @raxforge @esther-c @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @theshadow @keilah-h
The others:@power @calyhuge @whalekeeper @theducktator @elishavet-pidyon @the_lost-journal @trailblazer @jonas @beth-torres @euodia-vision @thearcaneaxiom @smiley @freed_and_redeemed @loopylin @felicity @freed_and_redeemed @liberty @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @rae @whalekeeper @esther-c @hybridlore
(tagging people who seem to like mood boards.
Maybe) @savannah_grace2009 @godlyfantasy12 @lightoverdarkness6 @mineralizedwritings @loopylin @keilah-hNew Character I just added into my WIP. (originally he was the be…[Read more]
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TheShadow started the topic Scenes in the forum Plotting 1 year, 2 months ago
Hello all, how’s everyone doing?
Recently, while writing my first draft for my WIP, I have been struggling with scenes actually connecting to each other and running in a smooth way that makes sense. Additionally, I feel like I’m forcing my characters to do something without actually letting them decide and let their decisions have consequences.…[Read more]
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whaley replied to the topic First Draft Blues in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Tags @loopylin @freed_and_redeemed @rae @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @linus-smallprint @savannah_grace2009 @jonas @ellette-giselle @godlyfantasy12 @anyoneiforgotandanyonewhowantstotalkregardlessofactivity
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Loopy replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
@koshka Hold on, I think everyone (at least the active people) needs to agree to move to the next day first. There are people role playing inside where there’s light, but no not during day yet.
@whalekeeper @elishavet-pidyon @savannah_grace2009 @esther-c
Is it alright with everyone if we move on to the next day?
I think we could fudge the…[Read more]
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The Ducktator replied to the topic Denomination Q and A in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 2 months ago
I don’t think @the_lost-journal was saying that the teachings of the saints are superior to the Bible. I think he meant that they were another source of instruction.
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Esther replied to the topic Denomination Q and A in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 2 months ago
@savannah_grace2009 @the_lost-journal
Plus, the Bible requires two things if you want to read it. Context, and an open mind. You need history and context to even understand HALF, if not ALL of the Bible.
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Context and History is all in the Bible. Reading other passages helps you understand other passages.
I would like to add something about t…[Read more]
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freedom replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
@koshka @elishavet-pidyon @godlyfantasy12 @rae @ellette-giselle @mineralizedwritings @theducktator @smiley @keilah-h @savannah_grace2009 @anyone-else-idk
Snippet of a future probable scene for The Bois’ book
(and I promise Leo isn’t usually this harsh. He’s just going through a lot when this scene takes place and running off of very little…[Read more]
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freedom replied to the topic Mood Boards/Aesthetics in the forum Characters 1 year, 2 months ago
@koshka @elishavet-pidyon @godlyfantasy12 (I think you’ll wanna see this😜) @rae @ellette-giselle @mineralizedwritings @theducktator @smiley @keilah-h @savannah_grace2009 @anyone-else-idk
✨The Bois Aesthetic/Moodboard✨
Also consider this my announcement that, though it’s not my main main project, I have officially began drafting The Bois’…[Read more]
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Actually, I’mma remake the moodboards, hehehe. So they shall be revealed later this week. :PP
@esther-c
I replied but didn’t tag you. Not sure if you got it.
I would be willing to try and help with this. You know my views on Romance are rather different than norm, and I believe highschool romantic relationships aren’t healthy. But I’m willing to give it a shot.
I also do edit. I’m not a line-by-line editor, but I have worked as a plot/character/story editor before.
We do have different beliefs on…[Read more]
I appreciate the offer!! Truly!
But like you said, we might not work super well together because of our different viewpoints. So yeah, right now I’d say no, but I will keep you in mind! :))
No problem! I can be your last resort if no one else offers. 😉
Sounds good. 😉 Let me know if you want to be tagged when I post the chapters on here some time! :))
Mm. Sounds interesting, but I’m totally unqualified. I don’t think I’d be able to help much… Sorry… 😅😑
Hey no worries! 🤗
I’m sorry, I don’t think I can help you 🙁
That’s totally fine, girl! ☺️
I’m definitely interested in reading your novel, but I’ve read almost no YA, so I wouldn’t be much help.
No worries! I’ll be sure to tag you tho when I start sharing it on here!!
Awesome! 🙂
@esther-c I would love to help! This went into my spam for some reason, so I’m sorry I didn’t get back to you. Are you still looking for someone?
Actually…I think you might be perfect. You gave some great feedback on my short story, so I’m sure you could do the same for my novel! :))
I’ll PM you later this week with more details and the link to the doc. Thank you so much!!! 🤗
Awesome! I love family and sibling dynamics, and I also read a good amount of YA, so this seems right up my alley! (Although I won’t be able to help much with the 90s references, haha.)
Do you still have my email from the short story critique?
Yay yay!! (Oh I know, right?? I’ve asked my parents and some other older writers I’ve met through KDWC, and even though they gave me a lot to use [plus Google, lol], there’s still something difficult about getting it right since I didn’t live then 🤪)
Yes I believe so!
@esther-c Yeah, that totally makes sense! I was gonna say, ask your parents xD. But I’m sure it’s still difficult.
Great!! 😄
I may have to get some YA recs from you sometime, because I struggle to find clean fiction that I would actually enjoy 😭
Oh definitely! I’m sure I can come up with a list. Middle grade stuff can be great if it’s well done, because content is so much better. 😉
@hybridlore
Please tag me if you post recommendations! I want to read YA, but it’s usually filthy and cringe.
For sure!! Until you come across that one middle school relationship that somehow works out perfectly. 😂
Ok for some reason even though I still see your comments on the short story doc, it won’t let me view your email. 😅 Could you share that again with me so I can share the other doc?? I’ll tell you as soon as I see it if you don’t want to leave your email up.
Awesome! Tysm!! I’ll probably send you the doc tomorrow since I need to make a few notes on it first. :))
Ok I added you to the document! You should get an email about it I believe. (:
Hoo boy. I’d love to, but uhhhh…I wouldn’t be any help. I’m a terrible critiquer and my romance experience is practically nil. You would probably help me more than I help you….sorry!
Funny enough though, my own romance work (a fanfic) took place in 1970 in New Mexico. What are the odds?
Ahh, no problem! :))
No way! That’s so cool! XD
Yeah it was just a consequence of how the original story was set up, but it’s funny to think about.
I doubt your characters will experience anything even close to mine though lol
Oh dear, was it a Star Wars fanfic?? In that case, I hope my charries aren’t handling the types of weapons they use. 🤣
No, it was something else, but yeah there were a lot of weapons involved XD
My Star Wars fanfics don’t really cross over into our world. Yet.
Though I suppose in a fanfic, you could do whatever 🤷🏻♀️
Oh duhhhh 🤦🏻♀️ I’ve watched like all the Star Wars movies, I should know they don’t take place on earth 🤣
lolllll no biggie.