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@mineralizedwritings

Thank you so much! That helps a lot. I think changing it through her eyes would make it a whole lot better. Also describing her family, is something I was struggling on, also writing who the Walton’s were. After I make some edits and add on i’ll post it again. You have helped so much! Thank you!! 😀

Also everyone (Sorry to chat so much) 😀 but I was wondering if you would want to (You defiantly don’t have to if you don’t want to ) But I’m writing a historical fiction book and could you just read over it and see if it pulls you in, if you can see it , if it sound real and other things like that! Thanks!

Jade stepped off the train into the…[Read more]

@esther-c

Your really good at description! I just love –  Ami melted under the gaze of Ev’s chocolate brown eyes.” “Ev searched her emerald green eyes, trying to understand what she was thinking. Its super sweet!

@thearcaneaxiom

That little piece of writing you shared is so good! I like how it paints a picture of what the main character is seeing! Here’s a piece of my writing that I wrote recently, it may seem not very exciting- but it is part of a book based off a nightmare I had and it is pretty creepy so I’ll just stick with this 😀

I walked…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

I haven’t thought about it much, probably them choosing the form they like best. I think I’ll change Valxene’s to something more comfortable but that might be what she would “wear” to a fancier occasion or some such thing.

This is the 100 word snippet I wrote for Asykko’s partner (oh, and smokes also have a color – hers is jungle…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

They’re actually what I imagine them to look like when they’re not possessing anyone, although they do look very similar to their partners – for example, even though Asykko’s partner is a guy he has the same swooping messy bangs, and they have similar clothing styles, etc.

When they are possessing someone, they look like that…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom @e-m-trepke

Firstly, they’re not human, they’re Smokes – sort of demons? Anyway, smokes can possess people and most smokes have a partner who, when they possess them, it’s undetectable (those symbols on the page next to each of them is the mark that appears when they possess someone other than their partner).

I haven’t done a lot…[Read more]

Another word that just popped into my head is “Somnambulism” which is basically a fancy word for sleepwalking, but it sound more exciting 😀

Also does anyone here know anything about describing people? Do they do it all in one place or do they spread it all throughout the chapter or whole book? I spread it out usually, but then think its better…[Read more]

Last one – I’m not really sure about her design, I’ll probably change it at some point but here it is anyway

@mineralizedwritings

That is an amazing description!! It defiantly would pull the reader in. I love the description of the blanket, It’s kind of sad and happy at the same time 🙂

I’m not sure I did the tagging right…

Anyway

@godlyfantasy12I

I have a whole book on crazy words (that I can’t get to at the moment) but I’ll have to share a few on here!

Oooh, great! I’m excited to see some! Also, yes I do  love to write description but either I feel like I write to much so that it bores the reader  or to little so no one  knows what I’m writing about 🙂

I have some drawings I did a while back for the bad guys in my WIP

There are four of them, but I have to send them seperately (I tried sending them all but that did not work)

Sorry that they’re so large, I couldn’t figure out how to make them smaller

Tagging people I’ve seen on this topic so you see:

@e-m-trepke @freedomwriter76 @mineralizedw…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

I’d be willing to! Example: (note, this is from an early draft of my story and doesn’t happen in the current version)

Jannira arrived in Nyxarado city in the late evening, the tracks of the speed-train seeming to glow red in the rapidly fading light. No, wait… The tracks are actually glowing, she realized as the lights along t…

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I love this topic idea! I’ve actually been keeping a list of words I like on my phone:

Modicum, Askance, Tenacity, Lexicon, Animosity, Perpetuity, Verbose, Assuage, Insubordination, Machinations, Peripheral, Cursory, Imbecilic, Bequeathed, Proverbial, Wry, Culmination, Vehemence, Fervently, Ostentatious, Echelon, and Indomitable

I’m not sure if…[Read more]

@lightoverdarkness6

That’s a good idea! Thanks! I also really like those words,especially jocular, gregarious and magnanimous . I’m going to try to add them into my book!

@thearcaneaxiom

Wow! What an amazing magic system you have! That is so creative and would be so much fun to read about! Unfortunately my WIP does not have any magic in it, but who knows maybe someday… 🙂 I think the only other magic books I’ve read, were all the Harry Potters which I loved. I think what drew me in was the great description.…[Read more]