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@kaya-young haha, yeah whenever I imagine the story of Esther I always picture the Veggie Tales version! ah, childhood…..

@kaya-young yeah the book kept me hooked all the way through. and i am dying waiting to get my hands on the second book in the series

hey guys! I just finished reading Swipe, by Evan Angler. Suspense on every page!

anyone else read this? @kaya-young @rochellaine @sam-kowal @warrenluther04 @skredder @ingridrd @notawriter

@warrenluther04 sorry it took me so long to respond to this.

you’re very welcome! It’s taking me a while to read through your story, just cuz of life shoving its way into the important writerly things of life, but I’ll probably be done by the middle of the week! (I hope, if I don’t get back to you by Wednesday or Thursday, feel free to remind me…[Read more]

@audrey-cayling thanks! that sounds like a cool story 😀

@ariella-newheart yes, post it!!!

@sleepwalkingmk That poem is so cute! 🙂

@jane-maree thanks! 🙂

@rochellaine agh, didn’t see that you already did this!

has anyone tagged you @kaya-young ?

So sorry I didn’t mention that my part of the story was Story #1 part 2

@skredder I thought it meant that he wanted to check on Esther by waiting somewhere where they were able to talk to each other.

That’s true; even after all that time of getting ready, it still must’ve been hard to adjust, but Esther still had Mordecai and she still obeyed him.

@sleepwalkingmk This is really good! I loved that ending 😉

whoopsy I didn’t see you were already tagged @seekjustice! tagging @rochellaine instead (lemme know if you don’t wanna be tagged or if you’re already tagged)

@dekreel ooh, this is such a good idea! here goes…..

The warbling got louder until he was afraid that maybe this forest wasn’t so good after all. He trembled and clutched his gnarled staff.

“W-who’s there?” he whispered. But he didn’t know if it was a ‘who’ or ‘what.’

The noise grew in volume until he was tempted to turn back and run. Go…[Read more]

@kaya-young @jane-maree @skredder @waterlily @notawriter @seekjustice @everyone

I read the first two chapters of Esther. I think that it was interesting that even though after Esther was chosen as queen, she still obeyed Mordecai as her father-figure. And I’m sure there was some risk to Mordecai standing in the courtyard checking on her. I’m sure…[Read more]

@gh24682468999 sounds like you were a very creative young writer (still are I bet!) 😉

@warrenluther04 cool, looking forward to pictures! 🙂

@dekreel not sure if you’re still here, but sorry I can’t join you today, been gone all day actually. will you be on tomorrow?

@dekreel wooooohooooo!

this was awesome <3

staring you in this one, I see. I totally didn’t get that in the last one it was gonna be you 🙂

@dekreel @daughteroftheking @ariella-newheart @emma-flournoy @kate-flournoy @ethryndal

And here’s a flashback to one of the first gif war that lasted 3 pages.
https://kingdompen.org/forums/topic/taking-breaks-from-unfinished-books/page/2/ between me, Kate and Ethryndal. *nods*

Kate, why is it that you and I always have to get stuck in gif wars? 😛

@dragon-snapper unfortunately, I don’t think I know enough to be able to help you, but it looks like you got some awesome advice already 🙂

@Dragon-snapper yeah. They said it. 😛

@dekreel @skredder I’m signing out now. I really didn’t get that much done. Wrote about 150 words, read some articles about choppy writing, and resolved I need to read more.

@dragon-snapper I’m not really an expert on this, but the thing that’s helped me most is mixing things up — variety.

Variety in sentence length. I like to mix long, short, and medium sentences in a fairly even blend.

Variety in sentence openers. Too many subject openers in a row can get choppy. Try to throw in some -ings,…[Read more]