Andrew

@linus-smallprint   @keilah-h

Okay, here are the questions I had.

Where the characters believable?

Did they have good, individual personalities, or were they clones?

What would you say was the message of the story?

What would you say my world view was?

Was there anything that seemed unbelievable or forced?

Is there anything that you w…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint   @keilah-h

Okay, here are the questions I had.

Where the characters believable?

Did they have good, individual personalities, or were they clones?

What would you say was the message of the story?

What would you say my world view was?

Was there anything that seemed unbelievable or forced?

Is there anything that you w…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Sure, we could ask….. i don’t really care tho.

I already have him in my mind.

@linus-smallprint

Okay, scrap what I said about the covers. I 100% got off of KP and went hunting for someone to design the covers for me. I have a friend who does digital art and cover designs, and I called her up yesterday. She said she’d do it. Sooooo, you can forget about that other cover. We are getting the real one! I am doing the cover…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

FIN!!! I’m screaming with joy!!!!!!

@keilah-h

yay!! I’m glad you want to read more!!
question: what do you think of the Seven year jump forward ending?

were you sad Aaron died?

I love how that soldier–Adrian, I think?–wants to learn more about Aaron’s beliefs after he saw how brave he was before dying.

yes!! That was one of my favorite parts. Aaron’s last prayer was that God would…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Well, it just gives away some of what will happen to the characters. That’s all.

Is that a bad thing? Do you feel like it spoils too much? What can you tell me is definitely going to happen from that scene. (Just so I can gage how much it actually does give away)

As for the cover, I’m not sure what you are using to make it and…

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@keilah-h

She sounds fun. XD

I totally recommend looking into girl’s/guy’s different physiological in fighting. It’s pretty interesting if you find a decent source, and I know it’s helped with my characters.

@theshadow same.

@koshka

Once most girls start to fight, they don’t care what it takes to win.

Hah, you just described my charrie Huntress. Good thing too. I was worried I’d made her a little too masculine when fighting, but now I see I don’t have to completely trash those scenes, just edit them a bit.

@ellette-giselle

On the other hand, do you mean that you believe it is wrong for a woman to enlist?

I personally can’t find scripture against a woman joining military, or fighting in real life on way or another.

Now, when women fight, things get ugly. My brother and I have discussed this before, having both done similar research, and I’d like…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

BiNg!

*screen comes to life*

That would depend on what you mean by “norms”. To be blatant, I don’t like crossdressing, and other such greying of lines. I like lines. I also like to know exactly why that line is there, and if it is a good line. As long as this “norm” isn’t a biblical thing, or crosses a line I’ve personally dr…[Read more]

@whalekeeper CHARRIE TEAMS YESSSSSSS

The Guardians of the Galaxy. The Bad Batch (technically they’re a ragtag group of misfits if you really think about it). Team Fortress (I won’t talk about them much here, but it doesn’t change the fact that they completely fit the description). The Dragonets of Destiny from Wings of Fire (again, won’t talk…[Read more]

yeah, I’m agreeing with @esther-c on this one.

it’s ok to mess around with the “societal norms” as long as you’re not messing with the Biblical roles. That second one’s kinda the whole problem with people these days who believe they can switch between the two (or that there’s a myriad of genders rather than simply two predesigned ones). That’s…[Read more]

I love how that soldier–Adrian, I think?–wants to learn more about Aaron’s beliefs after he saw how brave he was before dying.

The fact that you have a story where the main character dies and the POV switches is nice for me too, because I have a story idea where something like that happens and now I have an idea of what to do.

@theshadow Right now it’s going terribly lol, but at least it’s kinda going….

also, would you mind if I gave you a little challenge concerning my writing??

nobody I’ve asked has said yes to this, and I’m sure you won’t either, but you’re one of the like 5 people I have shared this story with so……

@smiley oh cool!! there are graphic novels?

@ellette-giselle

Can you create a link to share it?

@ellette-giselle

Um, because I like it. Is it bad? I can cut it. I just felt like it was a nicer ending the Sabina crying, plus I have a seven year jump ending in the next one, and a several year jump in the last one.

Well, it just gives away some of what will happen to the characters. That’s all.

As for the cover, I’m not sure what you are using…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle UM YEAH I wanna keep reading!!! Especially after all that!!!

also love the cover.