Andrew

@linus-smallprint

(By the way, I should let you know that I’m not bothering to read the feedback others are giving you, so if anything has come up that you want more thought on, please let me know.)

Will do. It’s mostly the newest section from this morning that I’m anxious about, because the dynamics are delicate. as you will see. And I’m i…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Poor Linus. You’ll have so much catching up to do. Sorry.

Yeah, yesterday was rather busy. Oh well. I have time today.

(By the way, I should let you know that I’m not bothering to read the  feedback others are giving you, so if anything has come up that you want more thought on, please let me know.)

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@linus-smallprint

Okay, that’s a lot of exclamation marks. You know five exclamation marks is a sure sign of madness, right? But you couldn’t settle for five, you went for six. (But who am I kidding, we’re all authors. Madness is sure to come with that.)

How dare you question my wise and perfect choice of exclamation marks! I have perfect contr…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Feedback for the second section:

Don’t have too much to say about this one. Joseph kind of falling back to where he was before, but it is easy to see why.

He could hear Noah and Sabina praying together, and for a moment he thought Aaron was captured, for this was how it had been.

This is a nice peak back into what they were all…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

NEXT SECTION!!!!!!

Okay, that’s a lot of exclamation marks. You know five exclamation marks is a sure sign of madness, right? But you couldn’t settle for five, you went for six. (But who am I kidding, we’re all authors. Madness is sure to come with that.) Ellette, what are you doing to Joseph?

Feedback for the first of those…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

 

Wooph! Got a lot to catch up on! Let’s see how far I get before I have class…

Yeah. Sorry about that. I kinda went on an editing streak and hybridlore was encouraging it. lol.

In the part where he is watching Arron in the fountain, he puts an end to it, and I was saying he was harsh based of of that. But I forgot tha…

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@ellette-giselle

Wooph! Got a lot to catch up on! Let’s see how far I get before I have class…

It was actually not Betsy. It was Corrie and Betsy’s Niece, Peter and Reuben’s brother, and it was Peter and Reuben who were under the table because someone had seen them with the Jews and informed on them. (At least, that’s what it say’s in Corrie’…

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@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h

NEXT SECTION!!

Joseph sat at the table staring at nothing.

In the corner, Sabina was holding a sobbing Eric, and Asher was sitting beside Noah, his face pressed against him. Alicia was at the other end of the table, her hands over her face.

Darrien had a hand on Joseph’s shoulder…

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@rae you–

you actually liked it??

wow.

thank you!

three months of my life weren’t wasted writing this!

My only mental note is it was pretty obvious that Spy was Huntresses and Scouts father from the point that Huntress entered his room and saw his stuff.

This is probably a relic of earlier drafts, in which Huntress figured it out while she…[Read more]

@hybridlore

I just saw this and thought of you.

@hybridlore

Okay. Now your good to reply.

@hybridlore

How could you kill your FAVORITE off, Ellette??? 😢

Aaron was my very favorite character I’ve ever written.

It’s dangerous to be my favorite.

Oh, it’s been picked back up. Just slightly bent now. 😁

good. lol. (No one saw that tantrum you threw. all’s good, all’s good. lolololololol)

Cool! So… how old is Joseph in the lat…

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Oh, wait, I only read it for five hours…still totally worth it!!!!!!!

@keilah-h

So…I started reading and couldn’t stop.

I found myself really enjoying the story, and I forgot about critisims until now. My only mental note is it was pretty obvious that Spy was Huntresses and Scouts father from the point that Huntress entered his room and saw his stuff. That and sometimes it feels like the scenes are too short,…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Don’t reply to the above yet.

I’m answering you again.

@hybridlore

lol. That’s great.

So because Julian and Joseph showed empathy for Adrian in that scene… will the government think they are Christians too?

Julian’s empathy is understandable. He’s trying to stop them from killing his little brother. He would have done that no matter the crime. He reacted badly enough to what Adrian said, that h…[Read more]

@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h

Here is Joseph!

(Adrian was posted at the bottom of page 8 for anyone that missed that.)

@hybridlore

Adrian was my favorite!

Oh no! I’m sorry he was your favorite! (He was my favorite too at this point.)

 

Your *not actual* book has been officially thrown across the room.

If you don’t pick it up again you’ll never know what happens…….. then I can’t be faulted for it being depressing, because you put it down right after…[Read more]

@hybridlore

I feel bad. I’m sorry. But then again, I’m also not. You know how that goes.

Okay, I was super stressed that you were going to find out what was going to happen because of Julian being in the RP! I’m so glad you forgot! I was thinking, “Shoot, I shouldn’t have put him in there until after this book.”

Question- how come all the other…

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@keilah-h

Thanks for sending the link!

I started reading it (just got to the part where Huntress sneaks into Spy’s room) and so far I’m really enjoying it! Thank you for letting me read it!