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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
Kind of. I did get a little hope, but when the mood switched I thought, “Okay. Here we go again. Do we have to be here for this?”
Oh.
I thought you said to go ahead and kill them.
Do you think it wasn’t good?
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
Hmm, wow, must have really sobered you. No comment on the amount of exclamation marks. lol. After I posted it, I looked back and was like, “wow, there’s a lot.” lol.
*Goes back to look.* 15?!? *Calls a doctor.*
And no comment on the fact that I offed Joseph’ best friends.
You’ve already killed off his father and two very close fr…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
i think so. He’s in the barn talking to martha
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
Okay. well, the Stripe one of course. That would be super funny/cute, especially with his ears flat. lol.
Maybe one of Martha and Alan talking. I would like to see Martha in an actual scene.
i’ll have to think more on this.
Do you mean the scene where Alan is about to head out with the Humlers and Oliver to find his d…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
Hmm, wow, must have really sobered you. No comment on the amount of exclamation marks. lol. After I posted it, I looked back and was like, “wow, there’s a lot.” lol.
And no comment on the fact that I offed Joseph’ best friends.
Ah. So there was a positive event in there. This is what you were referring too.
Yes, and I have a…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
As for the actual plot of everything, I really like what you did with the crow there. Ties in nicely. I’m curious as to what the king’s doing. Is he trying to help Alan? It may be that because he was interested in Alan’s success, he ordered the arrests of the Faithful in order to get rid of one of the wizard’s obstacles. But now, will he…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
Maybe. This is a question I will ask at the end, but so far, what would the top scenes that you would like to see illustrations for be?
Ooo, I haven’t thought of this really.
Okay. well, the Stripe one of course. That would be super funny/cute, especially with his ears flat. lol.
Maybe one of Martha and Alan talking. I would…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
“Today, the gates of every village, town and city will be thrown wide open! You will return to your homes, if you wish. You will farm the land; you will travel and trade where you will within Ardenta!”
Ah. So there was a positive event in there. This is what you were referring too.
“Let them go!” came a shout.
Joseph looked a…
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
Aside from Stripe being hugged, I really enjoyed the chapter.I’m glad you brought the crow back in. I was wondering how long it would be before you tied that part of the plot back into the story.
I haven’t been entirely sure how to fit it in all the time. Especially since many of its scenes are just it watching and Alan being a l…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
YEEEESSSS!!!!!
STRIPE HAS BEEN HUGGED!!!!
*does a happy dance* – Stephie
Yippy! Stripe was HUGGED!!!! – Ellette
*Bows*
AWWWWW! it was soooooo cute!!!!!! Now you have to draw a picture of it!!!
Maybe. This is a question I will ask at the end, but so far, what would the top scenes that you would like to see illustrations for be?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @grcr
NEXT SECTION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Joseph sat at the table and stared at his plate. Noah and Darrien had already eaten and were pulling on their boots. They knew the hard day of work they had ahead, and they had been able to eat
Sabina put her arm over Joseph’s sh…
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
@everyone
It doesn’t seem like too many people have been posting, but for those of you that have, I apologize for having been absent for a while. I’ve been a bit busy lately, but with Thanksgiving break coming up, I’ll probably have time to get on here.
I would post now, but I’ve sort of lost track of what’s happening, so it will take me a bit…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
Yippy! Stripe was HUGGED!!!!
AWWWWW! it was soooooo cute!!!!!! Now you have to draw a picture of it!!!
Aside from Stripe being hugged, I really enjoyed the chapter.I’m glad you brought the crow back in. I was wondering how long it would be before you tied that part of the plot back into the story.
Also, one…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
Woah, are you accusing me of being a sadist?
lololololol.
Thanks I’ll check it out!
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FIREQUACKER replied to the topic What's new around here? < 3 in the forum Questions and Support 1 year, 10 months ago
Oh, he is.🤣 I’ll have to remember that.
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FIREQUACKER replied to the topic What's new around here? < 3 in the forum Questions and Support 1 year, 10 months ago
Our entire conversation was weird.🤣 He also randomly speaks in a British accent during co-op, so yeah. XD
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FIREQUACKER replied to the topic What's new around here? < 3 in the forum Questions and Support 1 year, 10 months ago
Thanks! That last word is supposed to be my name, I think. I’m Abby.
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FIREQUACKER replied to the topic What's new around here? < 3 in the forum Questions and Support 1 year, 10 months ago
My favorite bird I’ve ever seen is probably a Brown Booby. I live in the middle of Indiana, and I’m not sure how this bird got here, but he was at a state park 2 hours from my house, and my parents agreed to take a detour on our way to vacation. It was so cool!!!! And a couple days ago I saw my first Eastern Towhee, so…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow @whalekeeper
Next chapter! I’ts been a while since I’ve done two chapters in one week, but I got excited by this one and put off some school. So here you go!
This is the chapter where my book will be redeemed in the eyes of Ellette, Ducktactor, and Stephie. I hope you’re all…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic Animal RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
@liberty @whoever is in this rp
So…I used to write animal fiction. In fact my first short story (written 2018) was about a jackrabbit and a meerkat. I stopped because it didn’t click for me, but I think I’m going to join anyways. So, sorry in advance if these charries are wobbly, I haven’t told stories about them for probably at least three or…[Read more]
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