Andrew

@whalekeeper

This looks good. I’ll note, I feel a bit of a blur between books. (You’re still in the outlining phase so that’s fine.) It’s great that you have his story divided into three areas of growth, but because they’re very similar when it comes to the actions Alan has to take, you need to make sure the challenges in each book are distinct.…

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@loopylin

Oh gracious. Yes. XD

In Leo’s defense, if was a comparison someone else made, and mostly depended on the “galavanting around administering interplanetary justice”, although Leo is more trying to outrun said justice too so…

@linus-smallprint

Don’t have the boys be eaten unless you want to deal with a traumatized Martha. A girl doesn’t watch her friends get swallowed by stone dragons and continue on perfectly fine.

What if there was some sort of earthquake? I believe Martha was on Alan’s horse a bit before? If she’s still on it and there’s an earthquake or something…[Read more]

@hybridlore

I already had 18 snowballs thrown at me by Stephie. *cries* Expect revenge!

@hybridlore

I’m in! Unless there’s something going on that day, which is totally possible, but I can’t think of anything right now.

@hybridlore

How. Dare. You.

IM IN THE CAR DRIVING 10 HOURS AND I CANT WRITE!!!!!!!

It’s surprising whenever Loops drops some sass. I feel like I need to duck for cover.

@loopylin

My first impression of a masked character shall be forever influenced. XD

@ellette-giselle

idk if this is a good idea, but I pictured him as quieter and much more thoughtful. Someone who is constantly watching and listening and so he knows a surprising amount about other’s personalities, strengths, and weaknesses. A peacemaker and encourager. So I guess the way you thought, except the opposite personality.

Funny. This i…[Read more]

@loopylin

Brooooooooo…

@ellette-giselle

Yeah…Alpha’s probably the most messed up…

@koshka

Rory

Rory jumped. “What? Nothing!” He stood stock still and drew in a slow breath. It’s alright. Leo wont hit me because I ask a question.

Rory ran the tip of his tongue along his lower lip. “I was wondering if we were supposed to get off there or if we were going somewhere else.” He shifted uneasily and made a motion to the elevator.…[Read more]

@rae

you and your messed up warriors!
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@linus-smallprint

Overarching Theme. […] What are your thoughts?

This looks good. I’ll note, I feel a bit of a blur between books. (You’re still in the outlining phase so that’s fine.) It’s great that you have his story divided into three areas of growth, but because they’re very similar when it comes to the actions Alan has to take, you need…[Read more]

@loopylin

Hehehe Alpha has more knives than social skills

Yep lol

Though, Dante better tread carefully, he has struck a nerve.

Alpha

Something dangerous flashed in Alpha’s eyes. “In no way is it stupid,” He growled. “Think for a second how you would fear such things if you were created in a lab. How would you feel if such things gave you life…[Read more]

@loopylin

Yep, it’s good. :]

@ellette-giselle

Leo

Level 0. This place had a funny floor plan. He punched the button and leaned back against the wall as the elevator began its decent.

Rory was giving him a weird, confused look. What had he said? Done? Leo lifted an eyebrow. “Yes? What is it?”

@esther-c

Within the next hour, everyone rushed around the house, trying to get ready for church and still be able to leave on time. This included a couple pairs of shoes being thrown down the stairs, someone looking for their shoes, people telling whoever was getting ready in the bathroom to hurry up, and a sister frantically searching her…

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@koshka

Rory

“Bolts and screws, bolts and screws.” Rory muttered slowly. For the amount of things they taught in Academy, there was very little about normal life. Mostly about killing and the most effective ways to do it. Rory racked his brain. The two words were familiar, but he couldn’t remember having encountered the things they repre…[Read more]

@rae

🫢

I can not believe he just said that to Dante