Andrew

@hybridlore

In Canada, do you have the same guaranteed rights as in the US’s Constitution? I’m assuming it’s very similar. Freedom of assembly, freedom of speech, freedom of religion, etc.?

Yes, we do have the same rights, but that doesn’t stop teachers from grading things based on what you write about instead of the actual quality of writi…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Okay, I’ll fix that. He was supposed to be joking. If he was joking would it work?

Sorry. Sometimes, I shy away from commitment and speak with uncertainty (that’s one of the ways my character, Eric, is like me). Maybe waiting until they are published would be a good idea, but yes, I will let you use them as a r…

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@stephie

Sorry I am late to reply.

Thank you for offering to help. However, would you mind waiting until I start posting chapters? I have a few people helping me with this already and I am hoping some people who are reading the draft I will be posting on here will not know what is happening in the story yet. Hopefully, it won’t be too long…[Read more]

A drawing of toothless I did for a friend. I tried out a bit of watercolour here.

I’m going to ask for some critique on this drawing regarding the proportions. I often draw characters separately, so am wondering how they fit together. I fear I may have made the horse too small. Also, what do you think of the character’s arm length?

@whalekeeper

Your figures look good. I usually do a harder outline around my characters to help distinguish them from the background. This was a tip I recall my Dad giving me a long while ago. The closer the object is to the front, the darker the outline should be. I also make sure my lines connect. If you’re asking about shading as well, I like…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

In my mind he says it in a joking way. Is that the impression you get? And if so, does it still sound like a mother?

No, I didn’t get that impression much. Maybe if you had mentioned him smiling, I imagined him with a serious/lecturing frown on his face as he said this.

Actually, this makes me think more of my grandma or sisters,…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Awkward bathroom conversations. Fun…

A monitor is watching. Creepy. I do know that feeling of, I could answer what I really think, but I know I will get bad marks. Although, the stakes are higher for Everette and Sara. Why does this class keep on reminding me of my Grade 11 English 20?

I see some family tension on the horizon in…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

I thought he might want to turn back and no longer continue with them at this point, seeing this as a sign to return to his village and be with Liesle (if I spelled that right). But he seems determined to keep going for the moment.

Yeah, Roland’s pretty stubborn.

Julian is sounding a bit like a mother here. (I’m not sure i…

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@whalekeeper, thanks for the invite! I joined Kingdom Pen about a month after Kathleen stopped doing these and was disappointed she didn’t continue, so I’m glad to see you’ve started this up again.

I would like to improve my writing discipline. I tend to get distracted quite a lot and often feel that I could be doing a lot more than I am. I find…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Drawing out surprise and mystery is a good idea. Hybridlore may want to know it all now, but she has more reason to keep reading now. Sometimes, it is even a good idea to never reveal but only hint, to allow the reader to piece it all together herself.

As for the editing thing again, I see what you are saying now. I guess that…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

“Governor,” the man said, bowing low. “The gods have a message for you.” Before anyone had a chance to speak, he shot his hand out like a serpent striking and thrust it at Walter’s chest.

Ah, so that’s the assassination attempt. This raises the tension somewhat; not so sure what the impact will be in the long run though, as this m…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

I thought so.

A lot happened in that last section that I was hoping on feedback for, so it was surprising when you didn’t say anything. XD

@ellette-giselle

Oh, never mind. I assumed there were only two sections posted when I was unable to log in. Now I see that third one. I will go read it right away!

@liberty

Would you be okay with me moving on? I don’t need you to give instant feedback if you’re unable to keep up.

If you really need me to wait a day though then I can.

@linus-smallprint

Hmm, okay. Well that’s odd.

Okay, so you have reached the point where Roland is injured.

No thoughts on the assassination attempt?

idk what I ended up saying.

Okay…. let me go look.

Thanks for the feedback! I’m glad the characters are becoming more alive! Hybridlore would disagree with you on not having all of…[Read more]

@theducktator @keilah-h @ellette-giselle

Thank you all of you!

@ellette-giselle

Yes, I am all caught up. No, I did not get your reply. Probably Gmail deciding it is the superior email system, throwing it out before I get it.

@linus-smallprint

OH MY GOODNESS!!!

That’s amazing!!! That’s so cool!!!! Wow! I LOVE how you draw scenes like that!

YOU MUST keep that in the book if you publish with illustrations.

@liberty

Okay…. I could wait I day.

@keilah-h

Glad you found that interesting!!

@linus-smallprint

Have you read the latest section I posted yesterday? I couldn’t tell from the feedback how far you still were. (trying to figure out how long I need to pause.)