Andrew

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You might live in some old murder mystery because on all the main roads in the town and the highway leading into it, there are these strange stains of dark red splashes on the road that cover the road for about five feet as if someone poured a big bucket of whatever it is on the road. There is one stain on each of the main roads and two…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

If you have another book later on that doesn’t have Christian rebellion as a major component, I will be happy to help, so feel free to tag me then!

Will do! 🫡

@ellette-giselle

You’re welcome!

(Odd how it’s so clear in your mind and then someone tells you what they though you said and it’s not at all what you meant. I find this in writing and in speaking.)

Yup. Another reason for proofreading.

If you have another book later on that doesn’t have Christian rebellion as a major component, I will be hap…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Yay! Thanks!

Let me take a look.

Wow, that was some great feedback, even though we don’t agree on the rebellion thing. So thank you for taking the time to reply, even though you don’t like the book as much as some others.

I can mix up a few of those scenes like you suggested, and I can reword a couple things, because…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Book feedback for you!

Sector 5 Book Feedback

@hybridlore

You’re welcome!

For Alec’s arc, I was expecting him to do something in the climax that would impact either Sara or Cole. Prehapes both of them. Something like helping Sara, telling Witlock that he can’t work there anymore, helping Cole ‘protect’ Sara, or even standing up to Cole and trying to stop him.

I think chapter 55 wouldn’t…[Read more]

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FORTH CHAPTER TODAY

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THIRD CHAPTER TODAY

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SECOND CHAPTER TODAY

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FIRST CHAPTER TODAY

@hybridlore

well i’ll try to add more later. i’m busy at the moment.

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a third new chapter!

@hybridlore

Thanks!

More in a minute….

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another new chapter!

@hybridlore

I have added my feedback to your file!

ugh. Still doesn’t work.

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1st chapter of today.

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4th chapter today.

@hybridlore

pfft! Why? They’re like my favorite characters in the book.

@hybridlore

don’t look at me like that!

What makes you think i’m going to DO anything?