Ruth

@rae

Yeah, nice job!

They are not trained in war. How long will the dragons rampage their land unhindered?

If these people think that all the people they pulled in are trained in combat, they’re in for a rude awakening lol!

@rae

Wow. That was beautiful. XD

@savannah_grace2009 @acancello @grcr @esther-c @mineralizedwritings @rae @trailblazer @highscribeofaetherium

Who’s going next? I can’t, because my character basically has to wait until the rest of the group leaves the house. Unless he just goes on ahead and doesn’t meet up with the rest of them until they get to…wherever they’re going? That…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium

Zahlin is somewhere around 6’6”

Goodness, he’s tall!

Btw what’s this place like?

Do you mean the house itself or Lillen? If you mean the house, it’s basically a mansion with various unexplored rooms if you mean Lillen, the world that the house magically teleported to, I’m not sure. Its @rae ‘s world, so you’d have to ask h…[Read more]

@rae

Oh and the paragraph about heaven and hell didn’t seem too preachy. I mean, I think it’s fine to have it in there since it was really short. Great job on the description of that, too! I think it works well.

@rae

I thought it ended really well, I liked the mentor-y moment with Master Paul! I didn’t really understand what Cubespace was entirely, so the whole incident confused me a little.

I think Master Paul asked Nahim to fly the ship, but Nahim said no, so the Master left him there on the controls? And then Nahim stabilized it and went to yell at…[Read more]

@jonas

So is that to say that if it somehow had multiple needles or something it would work? But then the two people would have to walk around holding the sword between them. Or could the evil entity somehow spread to multiple swords that would allow it to control multiple people?

Let’s just said that the physical blade itself is not…[Read more]

@rae

Would you guys like me to convince my big brother to come on here and rant about his cool stuff some time? He has like to much for me to count. A lot of warrior stuff, weapons, ships, tactics, armor, almost anything. What do you think? Should I try?

It never hurts to try! I joined because my little sister was doing it. This is great place to…[Read more]

@rae

Okay, phew! Finally caught up. And yeah, Chapter 7 isn’t showing up for me… so I guess I’m not, lol.

The biggest things I noticed were again, really long paragraphs. I think it would be easier to read if you split them up, but it’s up to you.

And long sections of dialogue without tags, like this:

“You can…”

“Read, write, and speak i…

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@rae

Hi! (I’m Elishavet [obviously] and I don’t remember if I’ve met or otherwise greeted you because my brain just will not let me, so welcome to the Kingdom of Pen! It’s an honor to meet you, hopefully for the first time.)

I adore how unique your world is, even as you employ tropes and tools used elsewhere. It’s obviously your creation, and I…[Read more]

*comes out of the shadows where I have lurked in recent days*

@rae

Intriguing story. It doesn’t sound like anything I’ve read before, although considering that most of my favorite authors are long dead that may not be worth mentioning.

At any rate, I do not believe I have properly met you either. I am Koshka, a writer of middle-grade animal…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @acancello @grcr @esther-c @mineralizedwritings @rae @trailblazer @highscribeofaetherium

I’m just going to post Ellis’s arrival scene now. It ends kind of abruptly because I don’t have anything for him to do before he encounters the rest of the group.

Ellis

One moment, the din of battle rang on Ellis’s ears as he charged t…[Read more]

@rae

Yeah, it actually seems somewhat unpredictable. I’ve edited a few posts just now that didn’t get deleted, so I don’t know what’s up.

@rae

Yw! Haha don’t worry there’s really no ‘right’ and ‘wrong’ when it comes to mood boards. Everyone on KP has insanely different styles.

@rae

Personally, I use paint.net. It’s probably not the best, but it works.

@rae

I don’t think you can delete one. You can only edit a post for a few minutes after it’s posted. If someone posts after your post, you automatically can’t edit it.

The edit button is at the top right of the post, next to the ‘quote’ button.

@rae

I’m a pretty shy person myself, but for me it’s completely different online. I barely talk at all in person, but I am prone to long rants online!

@savannah_grace2009 @acancello @grcr @esther-c @mineralizedwritings @rae @trailblazer

By the way, could someone give me a quick rundown of what characters are in here already? How many are there, and what are their names? I think I’ve read it all at this point, so I’ll probably recognize them based on their names, but I can’t remember who is he…[Read more]

@rae

After hearing your stuff, I really think my weapons lame. So far , with my WIP, Nahim’s weapons are not really special besides emotional and symbolic connection. He carries a green sword because he got that in the mormaka episode, and it reminds him of that, where he almost died but conquered.

I don’t think your stuff is lame at all! I r…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @acancello @grcr @esther-c @mineralizedwritings @rae @trailblazer

(I tried to edit this, but it disappeared when I did, so hopefully this doesn’t tag everyone twice.)

So where is the house now? I know it transported them across worlds, but where, geographically, is it? I would assume it is somewhere near a city, since they…[Read more]