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@godlyfantasy12

*Screams*

*Tackle hugs you to the wall*

YOU’RE ALIVE!!!!!

Ugh, I’ve missed you on here. How’s November? Lynn? Vulka has decided to take up skydiving someday, much to his brother’s alarm. He’s also met this girl named Katya… she’s pretty spunky.

I’m still so excited that you’re back. XD

@linus-smallprint

That’s great, congratulations to your sister!! That’s really awesome, thank you for telling us. I’ll make sure to get it asap.

@loopylin

The plan right now is basically: get everyone to the ship. So, I wouldn’t think it would be a problem. Worst case scenario, you would be responsible for getting your characters there without an NPC to help.

@whalekeeper Yesss that book is the best. It’s designed so you can learn it by yourself without a teacher. I should probably pick it up again even though I’m not in school.

@whalekeeper

Yeah, your characters can join up with ours! I won’t be able to RP much until next Monday though.

@jonas

I was thinking of adding two more characters and sending Felicity on a short rescue mission for one of them, but I’ve been delaying it. If I do that now, would that completely derail your plans? I can figure out a different way to introduce them if you’d rather

@rae @esther-c

I really miss this RP…is it still going??? And is there any way that I can bring Sef and Liv back…? 👀👀👀

@trailblazer

That is so cool!!!! That sounds amazing!!!!!

@loopylin

Thank you so much <333

Yesssss! I ate too much food lol

@jonas

Oh okay!

That’s not the reason anymore I guess 😂 I actually forgot I said that…a lot has changed lol

That makes sense though, I understand what you’re saying!

@savannah_grace2009

Before you said that the master wanted to make Jaden his second in command to sweeten the deal. I’m saying that if that’s still the reason, I feel like you should portray Kaden as more hesitant initially, because as it is, it doesn’t really feel like he needed that incentive.

Oh, and as for why I changed the ending instead of them abandoning Lilitu…

There are a couple reasons why I did that. Maybe they’re not good reasons lol but I’m going to leave it, at least for now so I can play with it. I think it will make the story make a little bit more sense  in the future so I’m just going to leave it for now.

@hybridlore

Thank youuu!

@highscribe

I think this is really good! You have some really nice prose.

Thank you so much!

I corrected the things you suggested and you’re right, I think it will flow a lot better! Thank you so much, you have been very helpful! <3

@jonas

I think I asked before why he insisted on this, and you said that it was to sweeten the deal for Kaden. Personally, I feel like you should show Kaden as having more hesitation if this is going to work. To me, it seems like they have already made up their minds to become Pythonos. Sure, they’re scared, but to me, it still doesn’t convey a s…

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@jonas @highscribeofaetherium

Oh my goodness you guys are so good!!!!

I actually have noticed a couple of the things you’ve said before but for some reason I forgot to change them… *facepalm* I’ll go fix them now before I forget again lol!

@savannah_grace2009

Yay, another section! 😆 It looks good! I don’t have too much to say about, but I thought Jonas’s critiques were good.

@savannah_grace2009

I think this is really good! You have some really nice prose.

The sensation made her want to scream, cry out in agony…

You don’t really need an ellipsis here. A period would work better.

“It’s those cursed Paynes,” Odessa muttered, anger flashing in her violet eyes.

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@ellette-giselle

Thanks so much, I’m glad you liked it!!

@power

Congratulations, your story was amazing!!! Everything was so well put together!!

@liberty

Thank you, your story was really good too!

@loopylin

It is very cute ambience. I listened to it half-asleep in my bed. It also has Wirt&Greg lore, things like Greg sneaking in to help record.