RAE

@rae

Because she’s a diva? 🤣

Lucille

For a while, neither of them had anything to say. Lucy slipped the leather cover onto the hatchet, and they moved on, the tree’s fallen leaves trailing behind them. While they had spent time there, a darker mass of clouds had approached on the horizon and the wind howled somewhere above their heads.
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@rae @elishavent-pidyon @mineralizedwritings Y’all are SO GOOD how–

@linus-smallprint I love your style, it’s so cool. I don’t know if there are Narnia graphic novels, but I’d totally read one drawn like that. Your characters’ eyes are very expressive.

@rae

Broooo I just realized you and Rumi from K-Pop Demon Hunters would get along

Lucille

“You save their butts from dying and they hate you because of irregularly distributed pigmentation? These people sound stupid. Chihuahua brains. You should ditch them.”

@elishavet-pidyon

lol, well thanks. I get told I’m crazy or weird all the time. XD

haha. It’s not me always either. But I feel like readers view us as always thinking that. XD

@grcr

I don’t know who got shot!

@ellette-giselle

lol there was a space in the actual doc, I don’t know why it didn’t transfer over…

This seems a little odd, because 1. it is one of the more standard ways of swearing an oath, and 2. as a soldier he would know this from training and wouldn’t need to be told. I would say something like “swear the oath” etc. Something that tell…

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@hybridlore

lol, thanks. XD

@grcr

Good scene! I’m still not really sure what happened at the end… but yeah, I was expecting the dad to die too. 😅🥲

I like the siblings too (although their names are confusing, haha.)

@theducktator

Yay! Hope you feel better soon!

@ellette-giselle Haha, your signature! XD

@grcr

You are very welcome!!

Okay sounds good.

Okay, for a little more editorial feedback…..

and Emrysrushed

Second to last paragraph, you just need a space there.

And then structurally,

Put your right hand to your chest…”

This seems a little odd, because 1. it is one of the more standard ways of swearing an oath, and 2. as a sol…[Read more]

@whalekeeper Your brother is an absolute diamond lol. Sounds like you have a good relationship with him.

@ellette-giselle

eeeee yay!! 😃 I’m pretty much open to all feedback… yeah.

(I actually thought the dad was gonna die in this chapter from scene 1…. so I’m relieved that he made it. XD)

LOL

It’s like a family I know, expect they have 15 kids and it’s all “J” names.

😅 I guess great minds think alike lolol

Yeah, it’s not vital. It probably wo…[Read more]

@grcr

Ooo! This is interesting!!

(I actually thought the dad was gonna die in this chapter from scene 1…. so I’m relieved that he made it. XD)

A few typos I caught, but at this point I’m not sure what sort of feedback you’re looking for, so let me know. This is interesting and I’m eager to keep reading if you post more!

So man y kids… and…[Read more]

@theducktator

lol. No prob. XD

@loopylin

Rory

“Push you? If you’re sure…..” He stared in confusion for several moments. Then, bracing his hands against the back of the chair, he gave it a shove and let go, waiting to see what would happen.