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@theshadow

I really like this chapter! Everything critical I was going to say @hybridlore already covered.

I really enjoy these characters. I like how Jack sticks up for his sister, and I’m eager to find out what happens and where Elina got her scar!

make sure to keep tagging me because I’m really enjoying this.

and those girls giving her a h…[Read more]

@theshadow

Sorry it took me a day to get back to you. Even though you said you didn’t like this first chapter much, I think it has potential. It introduces the characters and their world pretty well. It is a very short chapter. Is that normal throughout the book, or is this the exception? It’s fine to have shorter chapters, but I think it might…[Read more]

@liberty

Feb. 15 sounds good, thx

@esther-c Gotcha! A P.S. would be fun, but it might lessen the impact of the ending, so it depends on what you do. As it is right now, it doesn’t scream “actual letter” to me. It’s kind of like a thank-you-note (not exactly, but I don’t know how else to explain it.) or just a note. With a word count as short as yours, that’s fine, but maybe it’d…[Read more]

@theshadow

Fantastic! I’m so excited to read what you wrote!

@the_lost-journal

The rules are that you write at least 500 words, and when the deadline day comes, you post your story here.

Micah 7:8 Do not rejoice over me, my enemy; when I fall, I will arise. When I sit in darkness, the Lord WILL be a light to me.

No idea what that means…

Perhaps, I can share why I love this verse so much:

This verse is Is…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

As a reader, is this a direction you would be satisfied to see the story take?

Yes

What do you think of the character development you see in this (specifically for Alan, Martha, Eric, and Cyrus)?

Seems solid.

Now that you’ve seen some more, what are your thoughts on the similarities between Eric and Kalmar?

I think it’s d…[Read more]

I just found out there will be no more pennies.😭😭😭They were my favorite coin. RIP.

@loopylin

As are 95% of the people in the roleplay, lol. You’d fit right in :]

Lol, okay. I think I will add a couple characters there.

@theducktator

but I’m homeschooled, and therefore kind of clueless

As are 95% of the people in the roleplay, lol. You’d fit right in :]

@jonas

I may, but I’d need to read through, like, 40 pages, as that’s not one I stalk.😂

@loopylin

I’ve been thinking about joining the school RP, but I’m homeschooled, and therefore kind of clueless. I did however, read through all 400+ pages on a whim once, so there’s that.😂

@theshadow hmmmm….Interesting! we’ll have to see where it goes.

My drawing from two days ago turned into a sort of comic. My favorite part is for some reason the feathers flying around the sound effect.

I was gonna say “slight unrealistic blood warning” then I realized my camera barely picked it up lol

Gonna use it as an illustration for my fic, specifically this scene:

…we sprinted past the window,…

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@loopylin yesss I remember those!!

@theshadow lol they’re nothing like each other but hey, that works.

@the_lost-journal funny enough I don’t find those guy names ugly.

They make me think of grumpy old men, but not necessarily in an “ugly” kinda way.

@the_lost-journal awww that’s cute!

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @hybridlore @the_lost-journal

Okay, well here’s the first chapter. I’m not a huge fan of it, but the other draft first chapter wasn’t great either. So critiques are definitely appreciated.

Chapter 1

“You ever wondered what it would be like to leave Rosen?”

Elina’s eyebrows shot up, “Why? Do you intend to?”
“I…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Thanks, it’ll be a little creepy, though it’s not the main focus.

@keilah-h

Lol thank you.

@the_lost-journal

🤨

@keilah-h

Cool, lol. I’ll probably have him in the back of my mind now every time I write with my Emmerich XD.

@liberty

Sounds good.