Ruth

@ellette-giselle

You know I’m more than happy to help with these books…*glances nervously around*

*Turns up the radio to drown out any bugs*

I’m with your brothers on this one. It needs published.

You pick how heavy I critique/edit. You’ve seen what I do over email. And I’ll probably stick with email, now that I’ve got a…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I should have been clearer. XD I was talking about this chapter but also recent events in the book. One of the last chapters had this:

“Thisss one, Iver?” he slapped his knee, shaking his head. “You sssay your power comesss from this weakling?”

Iver stared at him. “She isss not as weak as she appearsss.”

Sef blinked hard.

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@jonas

Okay…… I put yes…. but that honestly depends on what kind of time I have. I may have to drop back to feedback…. or nothing.

@ellette-giselle @grcr @hybridlore @highscribeofaetherium @rae @theducktator @loopylin @whalekeeper @elishavet-pidyon @koshka @savannah_grace2009

Okay, sorry for taking so long to get back to this. I have a google form here to figure out how to best organize this. Please fill this out, even if you are just planning on giving feedback.           …[Read more]

@hybridlore

Wait really!!!!

*jumps around cheering*

Yahoo!!!!

@whalekeeper

I’m confused…what gave you the impression that Sef is stronger than most people the Pythonos use? that wasn’t my intent at all…

The whole point of the chapter was to show more of her weaknesses and now I’m confused XDXD

@ellette-giselle

I would love to!

My beautiful baby and his beautiful snoot

@savannah_grace2009

I like it! I like how you’re beginning to integrate action on Sef’s part. I definitely want to see an explanation for why she is stronger than other people the pythonos use. I’d guess her strength comes from hope, but she doesn’t seem to have any up until this point.

@keilah-h

Oh, I write all of the above plus some. idk. The MC is a teenage guy in most of it, but then so were Joseph and Aaron. 🤷🏼‍♀️

@ellette-giselle lol

I was thinking maybe it’s like an adventure story or a war story and they’re all excited about that. Your other ones from what I can tell are more missionary, persecution, or godly-romance stories, and most boys I know of aren’t super into that, especially the last one. But I don’t know.

@keilah-h

Aw thank you so much!!! I can’t wait. Yay! One member has joined the team!

What do your brothers love so much about it?

I hope you can discover that, because I don’t know…………

What do your brothers love so much about it?

@Ellette-giselle I will at least be there to give spelling and grammar advice. I wouldn’t pass up another great book from you!

@hybridlore    @keilah-h

Thank you, thank you, thank you very much. *twirls hat dramatically because for some reason that is the mental image I have* Feedback like this is always super helpful.

In answer to Hybrid’s question, this book is about the length of the first one with the middle two being the longest. I just submitted really bi…[Read more]

@whalekeeper @loopylin @jonas @rae @raxforge yeah! I’d love to join this.

all right, time to answer the questions:

Characters:

~Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?

I think your protagonists were the best.

~ Were there any character that need to be more engaging? If so, how would be some good ways for me to do that?

I do agree with Hybridlore that since Fox was the…[Read more]