Ruth

@theshadow

I’ll try to get to it!

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It has been a very long time since I last posted on this topic (3 months apparently). First, I’d like to thank everyone who read my draft; it was a huge help, and helped me re-evaluate my entire story.

Second, I re-evaluated my story and have chang…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Lol, that’s hilarious! Love the little interaction with Huntress, it’s perfect.

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NEW CHAPTERS

Sorry I’m a bit late today! I had a lot going on.

@rae

Yep. Poor Sniper.

ikr, poor guy.

i love how it’s just like:

the character: is a literal assassin and would know like 10 ways to kill me if I got within a mile of him. Plus my augmentations to him give him two or three more of those ways to kill me.

me: I feel so bad for you, your life is so tragic. I would give you a hug if I weren’t con…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Something you might also want to take in consideration is whether he is relaxed or has adrenaline pumping. If he is relaxed when he gets shot, he will bleed out faster. If he is high on adrenaline his contracted muscles will hamper the blood flow giving him more time.

@rae

Gotcha.

@hybridlore

Haha, Evan is great.

I find it odd that the others blend. I would get that with Jason and Brian because they aren’t around as much, but I’m surprised Ron and Michael do.

Interesting.

@esther-c

Okay, I’m all caught up (also was gone for a while), and this is a really engaging story. I did feel sad when Tyler was gone, so good job there, and I like how everything is going. A few things, I’ve noticed you used something along the lines of “(Character’s name) hated…” to describe what they were feeling, so changing that up a bit mi…[Read more]

Alright, here is my feedback!

~ Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?

You know Tyn and Cyrus were my favorites from the previous book. In this book, I enjoyed James and Eric (post-memory wipe), both for their enthusiasm. Iskyagus was fun as well for the brief moment he was there.

~ Were there any c…

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@ellette-giselle

I like Evan, he’s probably my favorite. The other guys sort of blend together a little for me (that might just be a me thing though.) Amber is fun too.

@hybridlore

Now that you’ve seen a good bit of them, what do you think of the guys (and girl) on Jonathan’s team?

@ellette-giselle

Exactly.

@hybridlore

I know.

But he is kind of being blind and self pitying. He does need to see that he’s not the only one who’s been hurt.

@ellette-giselle

Yikes. Poor Jonathan.

@rae

Thanks for the update!! I’ll keep praying!

How have you been feeling?

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@rae

Yeah, I wondered if it was Sniper.

lol you know me well don’t ya?

If I remember correctly, he was shot in the chest and the side of his abdomen, right?

I’m assuming you saw that image in the school roleplay lol. I think that’s right. I don’t think he was hit in the heart directly, but yeah, I assumed it punctured one of the big arteries…[Read more]

Due to being behind and the fact that I have a busy weekend, I’m just going to push my writing schedule back a week, so I should have the first chapter done this Monday. Not a great way to start, but I’ll just have to work with it.

@rae

Yesssss, pictures! Those names are so cute!!!!