Ruth

@theducktator

Yay! Hope you feel better soon!

@ellette-giselle Haha, your signature! XD

@grcr

You are very welcome!!

Okay sounds good.

Okay, for a little more editorial feedback…..

and Emrysrushed

Second to last paragraph, you just need a space there.

And then structurally,

Put your right hand to your chest…”

This seems a little odd, because 1. it is one of the more standard ways of swearing an oath, and 2. as a sol…[Read more]

@whalekeeper Your brother is an absolute diamond lol. Sounds like you have a good relationship with him.

@ellette-giselle

eeeee yay!! 😃 I’m pretty much open to all feedback… yeah.

(I actually thought the dad was gonna die in this chapter from scene 1…. so I’m relieved that he made it. XD)

LOL

It’s like a family I know, expect they have 15 kids and it’s all “J” names.

😅 I guess great minds think alike lolol

Yeah, it’s not vital. It probably wo…[Read more]

@grcr

Ooo! This is interesting!!

(I actually thought the dad was gonna die in this chapter from scene 1…. so I’m relieved that he made it. XD)

A few typos I caught, but at this point I’m not sure what sort of feedback you’re looking for, so let me know. This is interesting and I’m eager to keep reading if you post more!

So man y kids… and…[Read more]

@theducktator

lol. No prob. XD

@loopylin

Rory

“Push you? If you’re sure…..” He stared in confusion for several moments. Then, bracing his hands against the back of the chair, he gave it a shove and let go, waiting to see what would happen.

@whalekeeper

Oh my goodness! He’s such a good sport tho to reply like that! XD

@theducktator

I’m glad you got through it with no huge mistakes. Colds always settle in my ears and I get sinus infections. Really bad ones. Colds can be nasty. I’ve never gotten dizzy from one though…… I think? 😄

Praying that it clears up.

@esther-c

praying for you, Esther!

@rae

Unvale looks fun

Lucille

“Why not tell everyone? They’d stop hating you then.”

@ellette-giselle

Dante

“They’re… exactly what they sound like. Just set me down in that one over there. It will look less weird than you carrying me.”

Rory did, and Dante tried his best to not let any pain show while moving. He settled into the seat and looked around until he figured out how to unlock the breaks. The chair rolled forward a lit…[Read more]

@rae

I figured something like that lol

Lucille

“Huh. Okay.” She threw the hatchet again and succeeded. “Why don’t you tell your – uh – friends what you’re really doing?”

@rae

Lucille

Lucy pulled the hatchet out of the tree. Her cheeks glowed red from the effort and her arms felt good from the exercise. She cradled the head in one hand and the handle in the other, striding back to Gabriel.

She didn’t smile very much, not doing so on the best of days, but gave him all of her eyes’ attention. “Is Isabella your sweetheart?”

@rae

Lucille

“Bet they wanted you because you’d win.”

She stepped forward, gray eyes focused sharply on the tree, and the hatchet sunk into the bark.

@rae

Lucille

It soon became obvious that Lucy had less trouble using her own strength than quelling it. Every time she threw the hatchet, she overshot and sent it zinging back over the stoned ground.

But aiming seemed like a more important thing to get right, and after a couple tries, she remembered to pause and focus on the tree. She hit the…[Read more]

@rae

Throwing axes is pretty fun, I’ve done it a couple times

Lucille

The hatchet was smooth and solid in Lucy’s hand, curved to fit her grip. She tested its weight before nodding to Gabriel and pulling her arm back.

With surprising force, she whipped it at the tree. With a metallic clang, the hatchet ricocheted off the stone wall behind. The…[Read more]

@theducktator

Marcel

Marcel narrowly dodged. A boy, the wind-controller from the previous period, had already taken to the air. It made sense to place the flying students in opposition to each other. “Celarent! You don’t want me to follow you up there, do you?”

My brother: *Listening to a song with the lyrics ‘I just can’t run away’* “Actually you can, girl. I’d run away if I were you.”

Me: “No you couldn’t.”

Brother: “Why not?”

Me: *Looks pointedly at his disabled legs* 😁

Brother: *Bursts into laughter*

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From the outside looking in, it is strange to be someone who only watches disabled sports…[Read more]