Ruth

@theducktator

Thank you! 🥰

@hybridlore

Praying. 🩷

@esther-c

Thanks!! 🤗

@hybridlore

Praying for you!! 🙏🏻 💕

@ellette-giselle okay then!!

@whalekeeper haha it was super informal though, and I barely remember what we had to do.

I only remember my character: her name was Jayheart, and she was a brown WindClan medicine cat with a white paw and green eyes. Her name, appearance and personality influenced most of my OC’s of other fandoms afterward.

@hybridlore
@keilah-h

okay!! Thanks for the suggestions!! I’ll rework a few scenes.

@liberty

oh man. I have had some of the WORST sprains ever!! One took almost two months to heal!
Roland’s is not as severe, and he has been off of it for four days and as you can see he starts limping when they travel again.

Oooh! I love Dian!

you just love sailor characters. 😝

Is that why you like him? Or for other reasons too?

As for what w…[Read more]

@theshadow 😁

@godlyfantasy12 ooh that’s a good scene!

Riven seems to be different than in your previous drafts. He’s a bit more conniving and less “I’m evil cause I can be!”

I’m a bit worried that what he calls “protecting” A’grend doesn’t mean truly protecting it. But maybe he’s telling the truth. I don’t know.

@ellette-giselle yikes! that’s messed up. Although I’m glad the rest of your team realized it was wrong.

Don’t graduate our MEDICAL STUDENTS with horrible grades. That’s just unwise.

actually saw a thing about that, where a girl and her parents actually sued the school she went to for graduating her with a high score when she can barely rea…[Read more]

@theshadow great job!! Can’t wait for more!

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, that would be a cool scene! I’ll have to try to see if I can fit something like that into the story.

@theshadow

Okay, great! 😊

@godlyfantasy12

Ohhh, I’m kind of in a similar position as I’m writing the second draft of a WIP. I’m keeping some scenes, shuffling some around, and adding new ones. It’s been a fun juggling act 🥴😂

I don’t know how much of a plotter you are, but having a big picture idea of your plot is going to be super helpful. You don’t necessarily…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle I agree with @hybridlore ‘s statements! I think that bit about Leon’s reaction might’ve been what I felt was missing from the scene.

@ellette-giselle

Sorry, didn’t get tagged yesterday. I think Linus has a valid concern about the scene with Julian and Dian, but moving the scene where Julian shares the Gospel with him to a day or so later would fix it, in my opinion.

I think it was nice to see Julian argue with God a little bit. It’s slightly a different reaction than you…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Yup. Julian got hit hard….

Also, I have a character named Julian as well! He was once a haughty prince…until he got turned into a unicorn. My story was a twist of the “Frog Prince”.

@ellette-giselle

“For You, God, tested us; You refined us like silver.”

I read that verse today!

 The next day, Roland was ready to go on, but there was no sign of Rolf and Leon.

Wow. He’s healing fast. I had a sprain before and it took 2 whole weeks to heal!

Oooh! I love Dian!

“Dian! Kom hier. Ek het jou hulp nodig.”

I think I know what he’s say…[Read more]

@theducktator @whalekeeper

Mateo

Mateo still held tightly to the boy’s collar. Mateo lifted the boy to eye level with him. He stared at the boy. Mateo wanted the boy to feel, a dreadful kind of fear. But not of him, or of anything else, but just fear. It’s like being afraid but not knowing why or how. Mateo had the power to do that, but it was…[Read more]