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@elishavet-pidyon

Sorry, forgot to tag you, the reply to your post is above.

How much is he scarred? The entire left side of his face and into his hairline was scarred, as well as parts of his body, but he can hide those.

How quickly did the burns heal, and how impressive was the pain on him? They most likely didn’t heal that quickly since the little town Igua grew up in (not a Realn town) most likely didn’t have the hea…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @highscribeofaetherium

Lillen.

I’ve heard this question asked, and I feel I must answer it, lest the grace of the flower be shamed.

Milk-skinned are her people, with pastel eyes that can tell no lies. Sweet are her flowers, that adorn the land all the year round. Tis a tropical place, with winter rainy but ever blooming. Tis…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Have I ever mentioned I really like your forum signature.

I thought it ended really well, I liked the mentor-y moment with Master Paul! I didn’t really understand what Cubespace was entirely, so the whole incident confused me a little.

I think Master Paul asked Nahim to fly the ship, but Nahim said no, so the Master left him there o…

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Ooh, @power, what’s your current WIP called?

You’re making me laugh again! I agree, and I would rather keep my enemy at a spear’s distance than in my face, but Yeah, @jonas is right. Though, I have a rising feeling now to be my weird self and go against norm. Hmmm…

Second quote of the day, Normality is overrated.

@elishavet-pidyon

Sorry, I typed up a reply and it didn’t post, it might be tomorrow before I can reply again, Sorry.

@koshka

Hello.

Now that we know each other, here’s a list of random questions about your WIP!

1. Does Igua like fish?

2. With such an aversion to butter knives, is eating butter a problem?

3. About how old is Igua at the beginning of your story?

4. What do you think inspired his character the most?

Hello, I’m called Ru or Ruee.

1. No, he d…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Oh! you didn’t have to read the entire thing today!!! Oh, well.

The biggest things I noticed were again, really long paragraphs. I think it would be easier to read if you split them up, but it’s up to you.

Yeah, I’ve only gotten to chapter four with my paragraph revisions

What did you think of the scene in The Deal? Ya, know, this pa…[Read more]

Okay, here’s chapter 7

CHAPTER 7-THE INVESTIGATONS
The suns were bright and shining over Ladance as two Laxdains came walking together through the dusty streets. One was taller, dressed in red coarse, but durable, clothing with a powerful blaster strapped to his side, from his thigh to his knee. The other was shorter, but with tailored and…

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PRONUNCIATIONS
Note: pronunciations are in alphabetical order rather than by revelance.

Of characters:

Aiqa _ Aye-quh

Akin _ Aye-kin

Alin _ Aye-lin

Azio _ Ah-zee-oh

Budeca _ Buh-deck-ka

Canin _ Cane –in

Gaygarum _ gey-gar-rum

Ginja _ Gin-juh

Grostoff _ Grew-stof, staff with an ‘o’

Hallia _ Hall-ee-uh

Jonas _ Joe-nas

Knihan _ Knee-…

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Take your time reading, I just wanted to post them and get feedback so i know how to change them

CHAPTER 9-THE DEAL
Nahim tapped his foot in the rhythm of the song he hummed. Master Paul leaned back in the pilot seat next to him, maneuvering through a bunch of asteroids before picking up his direction and heading into Cubespace. Nahim suddenly stopped his noise as a bright nebulae passed by with a flash. Master Paul smiled.

“You like n…

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Tell me if Chapter 7 is missing. Cuz I edited it, and I thought it got deleted so i tried to repost it, but then it said I had already posted it.

CHAPTER 8-AIQA
Nahim tossed his sword handle up in the air and grasped it with his left hand. He pitched it again, twirled it, gripped it, and held it with one finger (or at least tried to, his green sword was hefty). He played with the blue one in his right. Master Paul glanced at the movement in the co-pilot seat.

“You seem to be somewhat o…

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@jonas

Thanks!

I just literally figured that out about ten seconds ago and edited a post I was making and it deleted. Woops.

CHAPTER 7-THE INVESTIGATONS
The suns were bright and shining over Ladance as two Laxdains came walking together through the dusty streets. One was taller, dressed in red coarse, but durable, clothing with a powerful blaster strapped to his side, from his thigh to his knee. The other was shorter, but with tailored and comfortable clothes, and a…[Read more]

@hybridlore @power @freedomwriter76 @euodia-vision @kyronthearcanin @jonas @loopylin @whalekeeper @anyone-else-who-might-have-slight-interest

CHAPTER 6-ON BOARD THE NIGHTMARE
Nahim was alone and unbothered for the first time in a while. He ran his right hand over his sling for his left arm but didn’t try to move the shoulder. He was different…

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@hybridlore @power @freedomwriter76 @euodia-vision @kyronthearcanin @jonas @loopylin @whalekeeper @anyone-else-who-might-have-slight-interest

Next chapter…I’m just going to post most of my chapters now since I plan to change some of them soo, but want some feedback.

CHAPTER 5-MASTER PAUL
Mandin adjusted the thick band to the satchel over his…

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@highscribeofaetherium

Thanks. I’ll try doing my first mood board. **Me getting a sinking feeling that I’m going to fail**