Racheal

@anne-of-lothlorien
You will be greatly missed. We who remain shall bear this loss with heavy hearts and hopeful spirits that you will one day return to the great Kingdom of Pen. Fare thee well!
In other words, bye and God bless! 😉

Great poem, @overcomer. I echo what everyone else said, but I noticed a few things in the last stanza.

They flew off refusing me an encore
So rapidly their wings whirred
‘Til they were lost among the trees
And I looked after them feeling absurd

Maybe cut out “and” in the last line. I feel like “refusing me an encore” could be first so that i…[Read more]

Great poem, @overcomer. I echo what everyone else said, but I noticed a few things in the last stanza.

They flew off refusing me an encore
So rapidly their wings whirred
‘Til they were lost among the trees
And I looked after them feeling absurd

Maybe cut out “and” in the last line. I feel like “refusing me an encore” could be first so that i…[Read more]

@Daeus I will check my calendar and get back to you all ASAP. This sounds so cool!

@S-G-Dewey
Wow, that’s a lot of instruments! I used to play piano, but I’m taking a break from that. I’ve never been gifted in the intrument-playing area, but I do like to sing. 🙂

@S-G-Dewey
Hello, and welcome, Susanna! (Love your name, by the way.) YES!!! I am a Narnia and Lord of the Rings fan as well (notice the profile picture????). *virtual high five*
*eyes widen* Fourteen siblings? How completely and utterly awesome!!! I used to think 4 was a lot… 😛

What kind of music do you like to listen to? Which instruments…[Read more]

@S-G-Dewey
Hello, and welcome, Susanna! (Love your name, by the way.) YES!!! I am a Narnia and Lord of the Rings fan as well. *virtual high five*
*eyes widen* Fourteen siblings? How completely and utterly awesome!!! I used to think 4 was a lot… 😛

What kind of music do you like to listen to? Which instruments do you play?

Again, welcome,…[Read more]

Happy New Year! God bless us, everyone! 🙂 😉

@gideon-swodon This is a really good subject I’ve been wondering about… a friend and I were just talking about it! I have enjoyed multiple first person points of view when reading it. But definitely making it clear whose point of view it is is a key… hmmm… Ooo, that’s a really good point, @ethryndal!

@alia Praying hard! I’m so sorry!

@daeus
Whoops! I was thinking of it as Matthew taking on the character Edwin Brook like Matthew fighting him or something. 🙂 LOL Now that you rewrote it, it does make sense. Nice work. I like the new and improved version. 😉 🙂 😉

@Daeus
I like the changes you made regarding the sentence structure that @kate-flournoy mentioned. Nice job. One other thing I noticed.

Returning to wreak his vengeance, Matthew takes on the character of the mysterious Edwin Brook. His wealth and power make his success almost certain, but strange events keep thwarting his every move.

I think…[Read more]

@dragon-snapper
In my opinion, first person is MUCH easier to write. It’s easier to get inside your protagonist’s head than it is when you are writing third person. I’m actually working on a short story told from the POV of different members of the same family, which I’m writing in third person. I like reading both third and first person, but…[Read more]

I like to read 1st best, however, that could be because the things that I have read in 1st have been really well written all the way around. In writing… it depends on the project, I write in both.

@NatalieMarie Hey sis 😀 Welcome!

@leumeister Hello! As with @perfectfifths I am slightly late. But I am glad you can be here! 😀

@sarah-h Hello. 🙂 So… trying to get in contact with you. 🙂 You can email me at the place I mentioned earlier… or, if you would email Sarah Spradlin at kingdompenmag@gmail.com …. she said she could connect us, but that she doesn’t have your email address. 😀