Power

@linus-smallprint

I don’t know. It didn’t really stand out to me, but then from your notes I knew it was going to happen.

Whaley did make a strong point.

I think you could go either way.

Honestly, maybe a mix is best.

Either your original way with a little more listening, or Whaley’s way with a little more anger.

@linus-smallprint

yeah, the girl slaves were in the house.

Okay…. maybe. That’s a big gap between the twins tho. I may change it. I have a new character in his 20s coming in.

@rae

I’m a little swamped, but tag me and I’ll try to join at some point. 😊

@rae

I like it! I think the part in the field is the only thing I would fix honestly. But that’s your choice.

Like I said, it’s a delayed hit.

I’ll probably cry tonight. 😂

@koshka

Imperial soldiers are young.

I only have two other teens.

@mineralizedwritings

np!

Will do

@whalekeeper @ellette-giselle @grcr @keilah-h @mineralizedwritings @loopylin @anyone-else

So I just got an idea. Recently I’ve been enjoying doing some art challenges to help me grow in some weak points in my art, and was wondering if we could do an art challenge together each week or two. Anyone interesting?

If people are, I’ll create a…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I was slightly sad that I didn’t make much effect (though what was I expecting when the writing for this final story was sub-par). i was hoping that the story would hit even if the writing didn’t, but I’m quite content after reading your last comment.

I will rewrite this story later, and then I hope it hits harder.

For now, I’m…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

True, but you couldn’t really make him 60, and you do have a lot of teens.

@theducktator

I know, right? XD

@keilah-h

My sister sent it to me. I’m not sure where she found it.

@liberty

Liberty…..

you are insufferable.

😂

NOTHING about Marius and the prince?

 

Oh, and…Dietrich sounds like a very interesting character. I hope you don’t kill him since I like him.

CALLED IT!!

As I was editing I was like….. this is going to be her favorite character!

@koshka

Uh, 21 is still between 16-30

@ellette-giselle

Why not bump Hans to twenty-one? So small a change shouldn’t mess up your plotting ect. but it looks like a new number. You do have a lot of ‘teens.

@linus-smallprint

Also, as for them majority being males, I grew up in a household of boys, and my sister came along when I was already in my teens. Sooo…. boys have always been easy for me to write because I can watch them. I find girls harder because I don’t really live with older girls.

@linus-smallprint

Nice.

ugh!!! Why did I know it would be you who would say that?! 😭

This is a big step for me! I used to only write people my own age or eighteen. Eighteen was the magic year that was always perfect to write. 😂

I have had some older characters…… somewhere……….. I know there were some.

The badguys! I had some…[Read more]

@koshka

lololol. This book has already been written, and I’m not changing anything, so don’t worry about that. You can email the ideas to me so as to keep the others in the dark though. 😉

@ellette-giselle

Yessss…but they’re kinda vague and uncertain. And I don’t want to give you ideas if I’m wrong.

@koshka

That emoji really shouldn’t fit you in mad author mode as well as it does. XD

🤣

Julian and Leon both it seems, though Leon’s was more of an encouragement and Julian’s a bit of correction.

Still sorting out who’s going to die before the end of this book, so you’ve done well there.

Have you got any guesses?

@ellette-giselle

That emoji really shouldn’t fit you in mad author mode as well as it does. XD

I see Jillian is having to play a Paul and straighten out churches through letters.

Still sorting out who’s going to die before the end of this book, so you’ve done well there.