Power

@loopylin

And that is a question I had to scroll pretty far back to answer.

Do we wait for Hugo, @whakekeeper ?

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CHAPTERs 14-15!!!!!!!

@hybridlore

I know! Poor guy!

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Chapters 12-13!!!!

After discovering that dragons aren’t as immortal as they seem, a corrupt monarchy attempts to take over the world–however, the children they kidnapped turn against them and keep interfering with their devious plans. 

This is for a new novel I’m brainstorming.

OMC I LOVE EVERYONE’s

A group of traumatized teens fight to stop a group of pathological liars from taking over the world, while fighting the intrusive thoughts to become pathological liars themselves.

@loopylin

AHa! That works… I lost my place too…

Now let’s see if I can get back into my charrie’s head.

Viktor

Lab partners. Right.

Viktor shuffled his notes into his textbook as slowly as he could, making sure each page was smooth and even. His old habit to duck his head out of friendships cut again. A quick glance at Lois didn’t help.…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

*Gasp*

Wow. I like Lucille Barnes. The whole scene was beautiful to read, although I’d like to slap a few kids silly. The descriptions were clear and lovely.

Poor Lucille.

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Theme song for Jonathan in current stage of arc and somewhat forward.

@whalekeeper

Aw, Lucille… I like Lucille.

I think I like her dad. Is he Dali?

I also found her description of her hair fascinating. Is it just metaphor, or does it have an important part in the plot/worldbuilding?

Those other kids are bullies. 😠 The struggle of wills in the fight was really good though. I liked how you focus on her not throwi…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Oh, I forgot that chapter ended there. 🙃

Yeah, they’ve turned in plenty of people. For Jonathan’s parents it was more Agent retaliation. We’re here to pick up the kid. You don’t have the kid? Fine, you pay for it. That sort of thing.

@hybridlore

what was sweet?

No, the gang was not involved in that one. They were killed because they hid Jonathan.

@whalekeeper

woah! That was crazy!

Thanks for sharing!!!

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NEXT CHAPTERS!!!

@esther-c

Okay that makes sense…I’ll keep reading and waiting for more and I’ll let you know if I come up with anything else!

@hybridlore

Yes. I did.

Well, you could….. I’d just have to write it……

@hybridlore

I do two chapters each day and then post them. I may jump the gun today so that I have some fallback though.

@hybridlore

This is draft number…… 7. I think.

I wrote this when I was 13 and have done rewrites almost every year since. This time I scrapped the draft and started over completely since I know the story inside and out. I feel like I can breathe again and it’s going much better.

@hybridlore

Do you!!? I like him too. 😁

I’m so glad you like it. I’m actually also starting to like it as well.

Any thoughts about the new situation Jonathan is in? Also, out of curiosity, what makes you like Jim? (I like him, but i know his whole arc. I’m interested to see what you like. )