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@freedomwriter76 @smiley
Eleanor. XD
Jayson

“Who are you?!”

Civilians. Great. No firearms necessary. I latched my watch back on my wrist and scrunched my eyebrows at the young lady. Faint British accent, over aggressive manner. Probably scared out of her witts if I had learned anything in Psyc.

Raphael slid his hands in his pockets with a sma…[Read more]

Note: we are still sorting out Raphael’s family history/denomination, so, besides knowing that they’re very observant, that’s kinda in the air. While he does end up messianic, he’s not quite there yet.

@freedomwriter76 @smiley

These two are written in a style that is way not my usual limited omniscient view, part of the reason they’re now joining this castle. So if the voice jumps around a bit, blame Jay.

Jayson Barans

Long gloomy halls after long muggy stairways. Just a few minutes in this place and the dark ages were making a lot more…[Read more]

@smiley @freedomwriter76

Alright, first quick descriptions.

Jayson Barans

Appearance: 5′ 10″, wavy brown hair, hazel eyes, lightly suntanned caucasian. 17 years of age.

Nationality: Canadian American. {Polish, Native, English, Irish.

Pastimes: cross country running, martial arts, books, viola, parkour, firearms.

Religion: Apostolic…[Read more]

@overcomer

Beautiful. The way you used layered meanings of words is making me want to get my violin out and sing. I love the ambiguous speaker who could be just anyone; you, me, a fairy child…it makes my imagination shiver.

I don’t have any real critiques, but as I just ran across this two months after it was posted, I suppose that doesn’t…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @smiley

Ahh, good. *Sigh* At least he doesn’t break your reader’s hearts too much.

Also, and this is random, but I just love the name Yosef. It’s one of those names that just feels perfect.

*Contemplates whether these two would help calm anything.*

*Crickets*

The more I think about this, would y’all mind if I did add…[Read more]

@trailblazer

Yep! It’s a great time waster… XD

@loopylin

Thank you! <3

Lol yeah… I’m taking college chemistry and I’ve never had a in depth chemistry course before. I mean I knew what electrons were…?

@whalekeeper

Lol he’s embarrassed by your immaturity? 😂😂

XD yes! I listen to the lofigirl synthwave radio 🤩 I used to listen to the normal one too, but I like the synthwave better. But tbh, I can’t listen to it for more than 2 hours a day because it’s a little too much.

I still do not have a phone, and everyone else in the homeschool group does…

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@whalekeeper @freedomwriter76

yeah let’s make up a villain!Or maybe we just throw them into a mind games labyrinth they have to escape together? XD maybe it needs a key but you have to find the bad guy who will give you the key?

@trailblazor

Yeah that makes sense! When I’m by myself, I’m a lot more attentive to safety/my surroundings than when I’m with somebody else, and that takes a lot of mental energy, so yeah the busier the store the more overstimulating would make sense.

*a stalker appears from the shadows*

@freedomwriter76 @smiley

Isaiah lost SON? You Killed Judah? 0_0

And Eleanor…what has your author done to you?

*Glances at characters*

*Contemplates inserting two in this sadly mistreated group*

@whalekeeper

*Shrug* 😅 I have five younger siblings, a sick mum, and late high school anxiety, so… yeah.

Oh wow XD You’re the oldest? That’s a full house lol

I just feel frustrated with my place in life, where I know I could do more if I was in a different environment. Don’t get me wrong, I love my family, but we’re not a naturally academic lot,…

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@whalekeeper

That is such a Tauren joke, oh my goodness 🤣🤣 Sweet child, he definitely needs that line in your final draft!

XD I’m glad you like it!

Right 😊 Lots of writing only sounds good if it connects to your inner turmoil (for lack of a better description 😂). I did not cry, but I could relate to that unsteady feeling of life changing, and a…

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@whalekeeper @freedomwriter76 @lightoverdarkness6 @loopylin @anyone else

(ignore if you like)

I might change this chapter I’m not sure…. but it’s just some of the writing I’ve been doing this November!

“Alright here we go! Let’s make it a good day!” Aleshia smiles, typing her apron behind her back. She smiles at Lesli, but with slightly less…

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I tend to name chapters based on the lesson learned or progress to character arcs. For instance, instead of naming a chapter on the physical things that happened (visiting the bakery) I would rather name it based on the conversation the characters had at the bakery (Such as… “If you only understood”)

Hope that helps 🙂

@whalekeeper

That’s so cool! It obviously makes sense to happen, but it must be strange looking back and reading into yourself like that. In a good way, of course! 😂 So much to learn from.

yeah, really strange!

It’s also fun when your younger self surprises you with something really well written, or a good joke 😂 Because now that you’re in the f…

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@freedomwriter76

I just realized something so interesting about my wip and I have to share it XD

Ok so I was rereading my first draft for fun, and weirdly enough the emotional descriptions are better than most of my current writing, but the plot is a total mess with no direction.

What’s weird is that the whole vibe of my first draft is…[Read more]

@smiley

Yes Bucky def needs more fun 🥺🥺

@freedomwriter76

Yw. XD

Sarah does seem a lot more stable than Yelena 😭

@freedomwriter76

I actually agree Bucky and Sarah is cuter XD

Yelena has such a strong personality compared to Bucky I’m not sure it would really work.