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@loopylin

Aw, yes, he needs to recognize that concussions even exist.

Oh, Felicity has a short fuse? XD

@rae

That’s hilarious, because Mars (Marcel’s nickname btw) would see Chase as the one to protect in any situation, even if Mars was the one in trouble XD

Calvin

“He’s missing.” Calvin kept his voice level. “But there’s no need to blame…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

I liked those! My favorite part was probably the worldbuilding and seeing how the fairy tales tied in to the series. You’re right though, there was a lot of romance. 😑

@esther-c

Heyy, I got it! XD That’s actually really funny and clever.

@esther-c

That is so interesting! I love the arcs, they sound really realistic. It’s kind of cool that Ami’s, Ev’s, and the villain’s main desire is for control.

@esther-c Lol! For a moment I thought that first one might be based off of Esther from the Bible. It’s not, right?

@mineralizedwritings

XD

Wait, you stole cookies? 😝

Yes… *mischievous twinkle*

But my mum almost never minds, because I almost never eat sugar offered to me. I sometimes near faint because of low blood sugar, and I’m known in my class for never telling someone I’m hungry or thirsty until it’s too late XD

I’m doing alright, everything was kinda…

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@loopylin @rae

Okay… he’s in the shop next to the dancing building, literally next door. Just so you girls know. Cal saw it in his POV before coming in for practice. Not that anyone knows 😅

Calvin

“Spot on.” Calvin standing nearby snapped his fingers, and strode over to join the two girls and interrogate the nervous boy. “What’s your name?…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

XD Yeah, I could see that!

And I don’t know why Spring sleeps on an air mattress, lol.

Here ya go!

THE SEASON SISTERS

Spring yawned, and slid off her air mattress. Her older sister Summer was fast asleep.

She looked at her alarm clock. It was 6:29. Just then, a piercing alarm broke through the silence. Summer groaned and rolled over. Spring jumped up and yanked the blind cords. Bright sunlight danced through the room. ” Time…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

GREAT topic XD I don’t have my very first story anymore (it’s probably in storage) but I have one that I wrote when I was… Ten, maybe eleven? That was kind of my first actual novel attempt. It only has like, two chapters. Brb, I’ll go find it to post

@fernweh_grace

Goodness XD That’s so fun. And yeah, crazy dreams like that always happen when you’ve woken up during the night and gone back to sleep again. Have you ever had a lucid dream?

@savannah_grace2009

Girl I feel you, I’m missing four adult teeth that will never grow in 😝

@loopylin

Again, please tell me if I’m writing your character wrong, or you want something to play out differently.

Babs

Babs wiped at her eyes. “Okay…”

They decided to do a sweep around the room, one girl starting by the exits, the other by the entrance. But Babs knew dolefully, as she trudged off to her side, that she would have seen the Gua…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin

Okay, I’ll think about it! No problem, thank you!

@hybridlore

Yeah, that totally makes sense! And you’re welcome, I really enjoyed reading it!!

For buildup, I’m not quite sure. Maybe Mason has a big decision to make, and something about the king helps him make that decision? Or maybe to keep it more line with what you have so far, something big rests on the identity of the king?? I’d have to…[Read more]

@kyronthearcanin

So, yep! Mostly just because of the curfew. I guess I was trying to show how the villagers were impacted by it, if that makes sense.
That’s true, I might use that word a lot XD. I’ll have to reread it and see where I can change words around to fix that. Thanks for pointing that out!
Yeah, I get that. I’m not really sure how the…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Okay, I’m finally here!! XD

So, I was digging pretty hard to find something to critique, so I’ll do my best…

“A hint of fear is smothered in the master’s gruff tone.” – why the fear?? Just because of the curfew?

I agree that it was pretty obvious the man was going to be the king.

In first person it’s really easy to use “is” a lo…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium

XDXD YES. You shall be one eventually, child of the pen. One day. I see it in you.

IM A CHOSEN ONE

IM OFFICIALLY COOL