A Poem I Wrote ❤️ (Hey… got any ideas for a title?)

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    Whaley
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      I wrote this super quick for poetry class a few weeks back. (I’m such a bad student… 😅) And then forgot about it. But a fellow student keeps pointing out how much he likes my poetry, so I decided it looks good enough to share. Lots of it only makes sense to me. Ya know, personal history, struggles, etc. Hope you like it!

       

      Socks as soft as dandelion

      Tiptoe along sidewalk cracks

      Pillbugs’ long shadows left behind

      Discern between wish and fact

       

      Cannot see or hear or feel them

      Pattering of angel feet

      Playing seek in the church basement

      Threadbare floor for marble street

       

      Paper airplanes in the classroom

      As we talk of worlds unknown

      Like it’s just a dusty newsreel

      Are we senseless or alone?

       

      Philosophy is best served with

      A noodle cup, steaming hot

      But while we’re down here on the earth

      Who knows what is right or not?

       

      Takes a heart to love a stranger

      Even more to love a friend

      Shifting thoughts like TV screens

      Doubt I ever will ascend

       

      Why know about eternity

      And restrain oneself like this?

      What did Bavinck call it? Desi-

      – Derium aeternitatis.

      KaPeefers 'til we're old and gray...

      #168014
      Whaley
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        @loopylin @mineralizedwritings @freedomwriter76 @godlyfantasy12 @lydibug @highscribeofaetherium @calyhuge @esther-c @euodia-vision @smiley @hybridlore @elishavet-pidyon @keilah-h Eeeeeeeeeeeyyyyyy tagzzzz

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        #168016
        Whaley
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          Oh and I have a Marcel poem…

          I should add that

          KaPeefers 'til we're old and gray...

          #168019
          hybridlore
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            @whalekeeper

            Ooohh… I really like it!

            There is always light behind the clouds.
            - Little Women, Louisa May Alcott

            #168023
            HighScribe
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              Great, KP ate my post… 😒

              WYOOHHHHHHHH!!!!!

              Ahem, anyways…


              @whalekeeper

              Ohh, I love it! Great job. I don’t really have any suggestions for a name…

              It's harder to make a square evil than it is a triangle.

              #168027
              RAE
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                @whalekeeper

                I wish i could write poetry like this!!!!!!!!!!!!

                 

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                #168040
                Elishavet Pidyon
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                  @whalekeeper

                  That’s a really unique piece! I’m going to have to read it several times over. It feels like memories of childhood, but it’s not all sweet fluffy thoughts. What’s the translation for the end?

                  And thank you for tagging me! I’m beginning to really love your poetry.

                  (Please share this Marcel poem. 🙂 )

                  You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan

                  #168043
                  Keilah H.
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                    @whalekeeper nice!!

                    Poetry is great. Also, please share more if you have it and are comfortable.

                    Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

                    #168087
                    Whaley
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                      @hybridlore @highscribeofaetherium @rae @elishavet-pidyon @keilah-h

                      Thank you 😘 *Dances a little Charleston step in due glee* I’m glad you guys like it!!

                      Desiderium aeternitatis means desire for eternity in latin, and for me the phrase represents the fusing of human senses with immaterial ambition. As humans, part physical and part spiritual, we have such a unique perspective on life. I just thought that was really cool, lol.

                      I’ll share the Marcel poem!

                      (Edit: I want to finish the next verse of it first)

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                      KaPeefers 'til we're old and gray...

                      #168127
                      Lydibug
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                        @whalekeeper

                        Noodle cup!? GUUURL you’re obsessed…

                        And sorry no, I have no title idea

                        Happy unbirthday every one!
                        "EVERYTHING IS AWESOME..."

                        #168142
                        LoopyLin
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                          @whalekeeper

                          I’ve read this like five times over it’s really good. I love the imagery and the rhythm. It’s weirdly nostalgic and kinda reminds me of my dad’s poetry.

                          This is kinda irrelevant, but it also brought back a fun memory of my brother and I stealing sugar cubes from our church’s kitchen in the basement when we were little. (more proof that we needed Jesus lol)

                           

                          Oh and I have a Marcel poem…

                          *vibrates excitedly* I- I wanna see

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                          #168143
                          LoopyLin
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                            @rae

                            I wish i could write poetry like this!!!!!!!!!!!!

                            Saaame

                            Space Princess ✨🪐 intp artist

                            #168170
                            Euodia
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                              @whalekeeper

                              Oooo! I really like it! Your word choice is amazing and very descriptive. 😍

                              and plz, i would love to see a marcel poem!!

                              I rolled the log over and underneath was a tiny little stick and I was like, "That log had a child

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                              Esther
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                                @whalekeeper

                                I love it!! This is so good!! The imagery is fantastic.

                                Write what should not be forgotten. — Isabel Allende

                                #168881
                                Whaley
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                                  ACK, I completely forgot about this!!


                                  @lydibug
                                  @loopylin @euodia-vision @esther-c You girls are so sweet – I love your comments and I appreciate them a lot 🥰 *hugs*

                                  KaPeefers 'til we're old and gray...

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