OrangeArmadillo

What made it decisive in my head, was Chase actually wanted this to happen. Sure, he would have avoided it in the story, but the Chase in my head told me that this all must happen.

I get that. He did however already sacrifice his mobility so maybe it just feels redundant to me.

It helps to keep some tether on the character’s mind even if you feel…[Read more]

Guys, I am so in love with plotting right now. It can be so fun. Just need to say it somewhere. 😛

@rae

I like the deer-like appearance of the unicorn. It also seems like a fun resolution scene. Family reunion scenes are the best. I can also picture Chase on the cushions well, because I know what it feels like to be an invalid now and then but still participate in family activities.

I feel like the blindness bit was too much? I mean for Chase…[Read more]

@keilah-h

That would be awesome!! Currently on my monthly newsletter I’m going through each of my planets and their races one by one, so I’ve been doings something sort of similar to that! Having a book out like that would be really cool haha.

@ellette-giselle

If you want to share your plot outline and story details, I could try to help you with a blurb!

@ellette-giselle

6 or 7!

@ellette-giselle

7 looks so nice with the boxed section on top. You could even try something similar on the bottom with your name, but this still looks good.

@thearcaneaxiom

I agree with every single thing you said. 🙃 And thank you,  I’m glad you agree with me that she’s looking for some recognition.

What I would ask is who is she trying to get approval from?

I don’t know her family too well, but I’m sure she realizes her parents wouldn’t have a good reaction to so much serious material in her work.…[Read more]

You believe in me when I can’t believe in myself.

Not to downplay Ellette’s opinion 😅 I didn’t really mind this part. To me, when I read this part, it’s more about the value of self-worth. You need people to believe in you, even if you can’t sometimes. I have low self-esteem sometimes and I need my mom to put me back on track. If we tell o…[Read more]

@rae

I forgot about this. I might join if it gets started, but I don’t have any ideas for what to do next.

@theshadow @anyone

~ Mentions of several sensitive topics all at once, sensitive people should not read ~

I really want to give an example of a too-dark story idea so Shadow doesn’t feel too bad about the atomic bomb idea.

I know a girl who is writing a fanfic love story. In it, the guy gets sent to war before making a proposal. Many of his…[Read more]

@keilah-h

This is still a serious topic though, I agree with you. I’ve seen darker on this website from a graphic perspective. Not to attack Godly, but she once posted a roleplay with a rather disgusting abuse description. I had to skip over it for my little sisters.

The abuse topic is strange to me. I feel almost numb to it because we’ve talked…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I didn’t mind that new revelation because it was barely mentioned. It goes right over a little kid’s head. And a Pythonos/Payne baby is an interesting challenge.

But I understand @keilah-h because the age at which you learned about these things makes a difference. If a teen writer is new to real-world dark stuff, they like to…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Thank you so much!! I’m glad you enjoyed it! Yeah, I’m dyslexic, and I told my parents that if I found fewer than fifty editing things I’d be okay lol. I’ve read through the book and saw those errors too, but figured it wouldn’t be worth republishing over since it’s not as many as I thought.

I have at least three books planned, but t…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

So, on the front cover, I agree that the title feels a little cramped. Maybe enlarge it a little and move your name to the bottom?

Also, I would remove the “By:” and just put your name. In my opinion, it feels more professional, but it’s up to you if you like that version more.

The cover illustration is beautiful!

On the back,…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

It sounds really cool! Are you looking for format critiques, or is it too late for that?

@theducktator
I skim it in the beginning and then normally don’t go back to it…  Maybe once or twice, but not every time a place is mentioned. 😅

@savannah_grace2009

Great chapters! I love the way you described this

worry striking a searing flame in the pit of her stomach.

And I love Cassian and Lilitu’s relationship. 🥰

@ellette-giselle
Wow, it looks great!! Thank you so much!!!

@ellette-giselle

Wow, it looks awesome!