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@SeekJustice I’m here to join you!! I have two chapters to critique/edit.

@Catwing yay good job! See you around. 🙂

@salome01w4g alrighty! Sleep well, girl. *waves*

@Catwing sounds like fun!! I’m halfway through chapter 37 (of Hope Ann’s novel Fidelyon) and it’s pretty good. *nodnod*

@Catwing @Salome01w4g I am here to join you! I’ll be critiquing/editing.

Rogue One is awesome too.

Guys. Just. Guys.

The never-ending discussion.

Kylo Ren is awesome.

@daeus Looks good. *thumbs up*

@daeus I agree about the last sentence/paragraph thing (and most of what the others said about rewording throughout). I don’t think the whole thing should be dumped, but particularly just the last sentence sounds sort of pushy and/or excluding or something along those lines. If you were to cut it, it might need replacing with something else, but I…[Read more]

@rolena-hatfield That’s great! It’s really cute. 😀

@raevynstar I must decline (way too much going on 😉 ), but I hope you get the help you need.

@raevynstar Cool. 🙂 I’m in Southern Ohio.

@raevynstar Welcome to KP! Where do you live?

@xonos-darkgrate

Yes, humans. Those are the biggest monsters possible for a good story!

That is a huge truth. Humans will ALWAYS be more interesting to read about than any kind of creature. Whether they’re good or bad. 😛

@xonos-darkgrate @that_writer_girl_99 I’ll be praying for both of y’all.

@xonos-darkgrate Heh, you’re welcome! By some sort of blessing or curse, I can’t help noticing all the punctuation-ish things, so it wasn’t a problem. 🙂 The comma is slightly mis/overused sometimes, but I totally understand how easy it is to just go with it when you’re on a roll. Best wishes for the rest of the book!

@xonos-darkgrate I agree, that was really well done. Very good at drawing the reader in, too. And I love the beginning quote by the Jake of Jacks guy.

I have a few things to point out, but they’re mostly just structural/punctuation stuff. The first paragraph, after it says The City of Cards, is mixing past and present tense. I can see how it…[Read more]

@daeus Got it. (Hear that @kate-flournoy? Lemme know when the book’s launched.)

@xonos-darkgrate Oh sorry, yup, that’s basically what I meant. Are you male or female. 😛 So you’re the first INTJ/Architect (dominantly at least) guy on this forum as far as I know. That’s real cool.

Aha, gotcha.

@daeus Welp, I’d like to read it again eventually (probably sometime after it’s published and we have it…physical books are so much better. No computer screen headaches.), but I think I can go off of the last version I read for the review if that’s fine with you.
In which case, when and where do I do the review?