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@linus-smallprint

Awesome! I approved it.

@linus-smallprint

hah!! That’s great! This is going to be so funny if I do!

@liberty

I’m going to be able to submit something!!!!!!!

@esther-c

I’m a sucker for the Aussie accent, lol.

Me too lolllllll

I’d probably react the exact same way in that situation haha.

what is it about them that we Americans find so fascinating??

@keilah-h @ellette-giselle

Y’all were talking about British and Australian exclamations and it reminded me of something that happened recently…

So we have friends who are Australian, but their dad is the only one who actually naturally has the accent. I’m a sucker for the Aussie accent, lol. And I was talking with him one time and with some…[Read more]

Also, one thing I just thought of; we don’t really care about the characters’ families since we haven’t met them yet. Maybe it would be a good idea to lengthen the first chapter by showing Jack and Elina getting home and seeing their parents and siblings.

@theshadow

This chapter does a good job building up the suspense! The only thing I would say is yeah, Ellette has a point. These girls seem to be so mean for no real reason that I can guess at yet. It makes them feel flatter, rather than like actual people who have motives and stuff for their actions. Their ultimate goal, especially in a…[Read more]

@theshadow

i am so relieved Jack is still there!! Also, I have a feeling I’m going to like Dylan.
just a hunch.

also, I’m not sure about Olivia and Adaline’s reaction. You see, when people bully others it tends to be because of insecurity and cowardice. I have yet to meet a truly confidant and courageous bully. That being said, they seem too c…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Some things I’d really like to hear from y’all are scene ideas. I’m planning to go back and extend a lot of the earlier chapters (at least 1-6) because I didn’t have the same word count goal for them as I do now. So if you have any ideas for scenes that would fit into those (or future scenes) I would love to hear them. So far I have…

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@keilah-h @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @the_lost-journal @liberty

Okay, here’s the next chapter. Any critiques/thoughts would be appreciated.

Chapter 2

It was quiet. Extraordinarily quiet. The clock did not tick on Elina’s wall, the alarm on her phone did not blare, and her siblings did not come to wake her up. The only noise came from Elina h…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Your welcome, and that would be so cool, it would add even more depth to Huntress and that point in the story.

(why do I write weirdly eloquent things like that? lol)

XD

@jonas lol that’s a good one

we don’t know!

anyone heard about the Duolingo bird being dead?

y’know, the mascot for the language lessons app?

well, me and my brother, we think we know who’s responsible….

Maybe I shouldn’t have brought up what the Duo bird does to people who don’t do their lessons when my characters were listening……

Sometimes I draw stuff for friends too.

@the_lost-journal that’s cool!

@jonas

Wow. I love this idea. This sounds super interesting. Is it connected to your current series?

@ellette-giselle

Aw, that’s okay! If you know of a different way to get it through, I’m open to trying other things, but I understand if it’s too difficult for you to do right now.

@hybridlore

no!!! I can’t access this without my laptop!! 😭😭😭😭

I’ll let you know what I think the minute I get home!!

Some things I’d really like to hear from y’all are scene ideas. I’m planning to go back and extend a lot of the earlier chapters (at least 1-6) because I didn’t have the same word count goal for them as I do now. So if you have any ideas for scenes that would fit into those (or future scenes) I would love to hear them. So far I have a chapter…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle (I know you’re away, so don’t feel obligated to respond to this until you get back) @theshadow @whalekeeper @koshka @raxforge

Sorry these are late, it slipped my mind until last night. Without further ado, here are chapters seven and eight (also known as the underground church cha…[Read more]