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@koshka

Ooo. Hmmm. I wonder which one is going to have the least people……..

Prob. the top floor.

Rory

Rory looked up as the door opened. Leo stepped out and Rory followed him into the hallway. It was quiet here with no students running about. It seemed… not peaceful. Peaceful was the church. No, this was… stiff. It almost felt…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12 so the brothers are a little like Moses and Aaron, kinda! Cool! Emyr would be the Moses equivalent, the younger brother that leads the people according to God’s plan, and then Daryen would be the Aaron-like, the older brother fulfilling the more explicitly priestly role.

(was just reading Numbers in my morning Bible study, so t…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

Praying for our sister and our cousin’s friend

@esther-c

Liking the story so far, it’s good. I second Trailblazer’s suggestions though, as more description would draw the reader in more.

@ellette-giselle I can get behind having a gun and a shield inside the pulpit. He’s well prepared.

I don’t think my church has ever had a shooting in our area, but we still have people guarding around. I work in the pre-k Sunday school, and sometimes, if the weather’s nice, we take the kids over to the playground we have just outside the…[Read more]

@theducktator

100%

Go look at Alcatraz if anyone disagrees with that statement,

@hybridlore

Lolol. you seemed pretty convinced…… 😂

Well, the overseers are cruel and they picked Ian as their target. They want him to live in the absolute terror that he could slip up any moment and that would be the end. It’s a terror that drives him crazy. He already had that rebellious spark and a sort of fire about him to begin with,…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12 wow!

so Ara’s family is all in high positions? Her parents are the rulers, her uncle is called a “prophet” so I’m guessing that means he’s their advisor?

@koshka

Rory

Rory let out a slow breath. He even gave Leo a slight smile as they road up the elevator. He was still turning the older boy’s words over in his mind. It didn’t make much sense. After all, they said that fear was weakness and that’s why they were punishing him and the others. Rory chewed on his lip and then quickly stopped,…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12 oh, cool! Those are really pretty colors you’ve picked, too.

so one of them dies canonically? Or you’re just saying if one dies the crystal goes dull? Will someone else get it, or will it just never be usable again cause its owner is gone forever? (Unless he or she has a way of coming back.)

@linus-smallprint

Yeah. I didn’t think it was realistic for her to be able to keep disappearing without her family knowing.

@linus-smallprint lol

I see the prologue (btw I love how it’s called “The Chapter Before”) already has a title!

@linus-smallprint Probably a good idea to wait till a later draft.

Can’t wait to see what’s in store for Alan and the group!

@ellette-giselle

Leon!!! I didn’t think you would kill him!!

I didn’t feel like the overseers punishing Leon instead of Ian was unrealistic. However, I’m starting to wonder what Ian did to deserve it. I know they’d had their eyes on him, but all he did was trip, right?

Julian’s scene was good too. I liked how it started raining and they were…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle So Leon’s life was spared! I’m interested to see where this is going, then.

And Julian’s fire incident was a sad thing, but it’s true that such a thing happens. Even here in America we have the occasional church shootout or similar incident. Haven’t heard of church arson much (here in the US anyway) but it’s entirely possible.

@the_lost-journal I’ll be praying too. It’s just horrible that such a thing happened.

@theshadow

Awesome, thanks!

@linus-smallprint

Great, thank you!! What made you guess that? You’re right xD

@godlyfantasy12 that’s a great message!!

what are the crystals for btw? Are they just like “badges” of some kind, or do they have a deeper meaning?

@the_lost-journal

Oh no, I’m so sorry. Praying for them 🙏