Loopy

@koshka

he was just messed up. Period.

Thankfully, he’s less messed up now.

He’s a very purpose driven person. Take away his purpose, and he’s got nothing left.

@koshka

Wow!! You did catch it!

That’s impressive.

that would be about the time. He had this almost horrifying relief that he hadn’t been killed, he didn’t know what on earth to do with Leon’s sacrifice and felt bound to help him in some sort of payment, but once Leon was on the road to recovery there was nothing left for him.

@loopylin

Chase

Chase watched Felicity open the can, his eyes slowly turning purple as the soda came pouring out the top.

“So, yeah. You just flip up the tab. Like I did, except more… carefully.”

Chase made eye contact with her, his eyes a purple the shade of a violets’ petals. He nodded, less shyly than he previously had, more sure of himse…[Read more]

@koshka

No prob!!

Rory

Rory watched in stunned silence as the woman raced about, Leo trailing her and trying to catch things she knocked over in her haste. She was rattling on about something, but Rory was having a hard time tracking. It wasn’t that he was unable to take in her words… he most certainly was, along with every object and…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Haha, well, you and everyone else. (except Linus. He says he saw it coming, and I’m wondering if he caught on to something, or has read enough of my stuff that he guessed it was something I would do. 😂)

 

Is Leon going to heal now that this new slave master is kinder to them and won’t make him work as hard as he did?

🤷🏼‍♀️

There i…[Read more]

@koshka

I also liked the way Leon realizes he’s dying, and that he doesn’t have much time left to work here. The urgency that comes over his actions was real to me.

Oh yeah, I see that. There definitely is an urgency.

And then the whole “you’re crazy but I still kinda admire your attitude” thing was funny, but unfortunately real.

🤣 I like Albe…[Read more]

@liberty

I really like him, and he’s very intriguing. He sounds like a character that could demand an entire book of his own! He reminds me of the monks who bought Squanto.

I was literally thinking, “This guy needs his own book!” while I was editing! 🤣

Oh wow, that’s brutal. But those are the stories I love best!! Stories of REAL s…[Read more]

@koshka

Wow!!!

*sits there and reads with mouth open* I had no idea I did all that!!

BUT ACTUALLY

*clears throat and nods* of course of course… it’s all with the flows of literary design and technique. 😂

It’s actually really cool seeing you lay it out like that, because I had no idea I had done that.

@linus-smallprint

You know what, I was thinking that while I was editing yesterday morning!! 😂

When I hear this name, I think of an old, kindly grandfather.

Um…… you’re off by like 40 years.

I would peg this guy in his late 30s. Maybe early 40s.

It wasn’t too long ago that he was still physically fighting the slave trade, and he was a…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

No soup…….?

*paces around room. Tries to understand why that’s funny. Knows that once it is explained I will remember why it was funny*

@freed_and_redeemed

YAY!!! SCENE!!!

Oh dear. Poor Riker…….. This is a bit of a fix.

@freed_and_redeemed ^^

@freedomwriter76 Great scene! *sniffles* 💔😭

@the_lost-journal That’s exciting! Hopefully it works!

@godlyfantasy12 cool beans 😉

@jonas you’re welcome!

@the_lost-journal Beetles are really cool! I based one of my fantasy creatures, the Suileans, off of them. (In my TF2 sci-fi world, Demoman is a Suilean.) Did you know there are at least 400,000 species of beetles in the world?

and yeah I like praying mantises too–I have a really cool Lego set of one that I got for Christmas. It was in a pack of…[Read more]

@jonas yeah maybe!

also cool profile pic design.

@the_lost-journal

Sorry for taking so LONNNGGGG to reply!

Well now we’re even because I took FOREVER to reply as well!! 🤣 So sorry!!! 😭

Oh, yeah I should’ve mentioned that! About how mega churches are almost always portrayed badly. (Ofc there are some awful mega churches.) But what I mean about “giving them a good church experience” is truly b…

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@savannah_grace2009

Yes, of course girl!! <333

@savannah_grace2009

Thanks!! <33

one thing I’ll suggest, is that I feel like you don’t really introduce the family to us in the first few chapters. At first I wasn’t even sure if Blake was their sibling or not XDXD

They do have a HUGE family, so setting a solid foundation and making all the siblings and the parents unique and established in ou…

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