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@linus-smallprint

Nooooo! I am losing my only guy feedback person! 😱

I understand that though.

A World War II spy story!

Funny you say that….. I currently am writing a WWII spy story. F.O.S. But no, this is not WWII.

@hybridlore

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@hybridlore

That would be lovely, if you please

@whalekeeper

Yay!!

Would you like me to add you to the Part 2 doc?

@ellette-giselle

Yes, but I may need a few days or so off first. (You’re probably not starting immediately anyway.)

@jonas

I second what Ellette says. It depends on what things look like with my mom and how much time I’ll have between family stuff and working. But I would really love to do this!!!

@whalekeeper

Ohhhh that makes more sense.

And then Iver proves himself right. On the one hand, maybe this just means Sef believes the lies more than other people would. But I got the sense that Iver was referring to how long she has lasted without dying. If that’s true, Sef would have to possess more strength than a normal Pythonos’ sla…

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@koshka

Really?! Ah yay!!!

Wait, you think it needs to be published?! Woah!

Okay, so you’re saying you’ll only give feedback in email, not KP? Or did I misunderstand that completely?

Boom, finally caught up

@savannah_grace2009

I should have been clearer. XD I was talking about this chapter but also recent events in the book. One of the last chapters had this:

“Thisss one, Iver?” he slapped his knee, shaking his head. “You sssay your power comesss from this weakling?”

Iver stared at him. “She isss not as weak as she appearsss.”

Sef blinked hard.

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@jonas

Okay…… I put yes…. but that honestly depends on what kind of time I have. I may have to drop back to feedback…. or nothing.

@hybridlore

Wait really!!!!

*jumps around cheering*

Yahoo!!!!

@whalekeeper

I’m confused…what gave you the impression that Sef is stronger than most people the Pythonos use? that wasn’t my intent at all…

The whole point of the chapter was to show more of her weaknesses and now I’m confused XDXD

@ellette-giselle

I would love to!

My beautiful baby and his beautiful snoot

@savannah_grace2009

I like it! I like how you’re beginning to integrate action on Sef’s part. I definitely want to see an explanation for why she is stronger than other people the pythonos use. I’d guess her strength comes from hope, but she doesn’t seem to have any up until this point.

@keilah-h

Oh, I write all of the above plus some. idk. The MC is a teenage guy in most of it, but then so were Joseph and Aaron. 🤷🏼‍♀️

@ellette-giselle lol

I was thinking maybe it’s like an adventure story or a war story and they’re all excited about that. Your other ones from what I can tell are more missionary, persecution, or godly-romance stories, and most boys I know of aren’t super into that, especially the last one. But I don’t know.

@keilah-h

Aw thank you so much!!! I can’t wait. Yay! One member has joined the team!

What do your brothers love so much about it?

I hope you can discover that, because I don’t know…………