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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
@linus-smallprint lol that raccoon
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
You’re very welcome.
Also, why does that racoon picture have an expression that so fits what I know of you? lolololol.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
I have the same thought as Hybrid here. Beric has not only been independent for a while now, but he is also a teen. I’m glad you included the scene of his struggle to listen.
Thanks. It actually wasn’t in the first or second draft. I had a reference made to it in the third, but I thought I should flush it out into a full s…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
Sounds good!
I’ll see if I can get at least one of your new sections done today.
Wonderful!! Thanks! Looking forward to it!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
Also, what about Andrew Peterson’s Carry the Fire? We both agreed on that one.
Okay yeah, we did. That one is a great song.
Oh, looks like you mentioned the editor question. Ignore my second offer. I thought you might have missed it.Glad you found a good person for the job!
😉
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
I don’t know how to send doc. links. so, here are my answers.
The Narrow Path Trilogy: Book One – The Cost Feedback Questions
Character
~ Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?
Alan. Because he was the redemption character, and I LOVE redemption characters. If you look at my…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
@whalekeeper yess Tyn is awesome
IDK why, I just like her.
Oliver is my other favorite but that’s probably cause he’s an Australian lizard and you know how I feel about both of those things.
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
I’d give you cake, but that would be a lie, and then I’d end up being sued by GLaDOS, and that is a fight I can’t win, so sorry. I hope you had a good birthday though!
Portal mention eeeeeeee
I haven’t played the games yet (I like puzzle games) but I like listening to their soundtracks. They’re so weird and synth-y.
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Enid replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
Will keep questions in mind 👍
Glad to hear! Tyn was a character I didn’t like much in the first draft and I was considering changing her a lot until I got near the end of it and she went through some really interesting character development. I think in the draft two versions I understood her more.
I think she’s really fun, but I…[Read more]
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Enid replied to the topic Character Castle! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 8 months ago
I’m going to guess neither of you minds what happens 😛
Barnes
Her sight flooding back to her, Barnes found one of her wrists was held by one of the magical tendrils. Her other hand was free, and Reid was recovering from a hit to the face.
In front of them, the snake lay on the ground. Its eyes faded from blue to a cloudy…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
My sister managed to get away with one-word answers for the questions I did for my first draft
lol. That sounds like my brother.
I’m on it. Give me one sec….
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Rant Room for Baker Family Adventures Fans!!! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 8 months ago
one older brother
LUCKYYYYYYY!!!!! That’s why I like Phil so much. He’s my fictional older brother.
I’m the oldest with two younger brothers and a younger sister.
My friend actually had Summer of Suspense and lent it to me. I liked it so much I looked up the author to see if she wrote anything else, and then I discovered it was…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 8 months ago
OH IT IS SO GOOD!
You must read it!
You won’t be able to put it down. It is stressful!!!
(Peder is my favorite character by the way.)
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 8 months ago
No! I’ve never been to Highland games. That sounds AMAZING!
Have you?
My dad has the German. Our last name is actually German, and I look very German, though my brothers take after the highlander and irish side.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
Mainly just feedback. I have an actually editor who can catch typos, but if you see anything then you can mention it.
I hope Amelia doesn’t die.
Oh dear.
That would be an interesting twist—if everyone thinks she’s going to have the plague, but then she really ends up having a baby. But we shall see.
Hmm, it would be.…[Read more]
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Enid replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
What kind of feedback are you looking for? Do you want just a chill overview of what I think, or more detailed and critique-ish?
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
Whoa. Can I ask how much of the book is still left? That seems like it’s going to be a lot of sections.
I don’t mind the longer pieces, though, (🤪) as long as you’re okay with me not being as nitpicky. Im not sure if you’re mainly wanting feedback on bigger things or if you want me to catch all the typos and everything too. If…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 8 months ago
Oh this is WAY better then Mufasa!
No, I haven’t. My family is waiting for a time when we can watch it without my very little sister. She couldn’t see a movie like that!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Rant Room for Baker Family Adventures Fans!!! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 8 months ago
Gahahaha!!! It’s sounds like Legolas and Aragorn looking for Gollum!
Is that good or bad? lolol
Alastair isn’t Gollum! *gasp* how horrid!
Hey…when you said this something struck me. Do you like Rolf so much because he’s German? *grin* I mean, this just reminds me of your German couple!
giggles sheepishly.
Well, being German as we…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 8 months ago
It’s already available on Amazon Prime.
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