Loopy

I had a consultation with my doctor yesterday since my bloodwork results finally came in. I have lymes AGAIN. It came as a little bit of a surprise, since I’ve not found many ticks on me this year, but ticks are sneaky things. *Sigh* so here I go, going on a month of antibiotics in SUMMER. Not looking forward to it, as I do rowing/crew, and I have…[Read more]

@hybridlore

hmmm. What do you think of Me just removing the last paragraph completely? Would that be enough?

yes, I designed all of it.

@ellette-giselle

The cover looks really cool! Who designed the image? Was that you?

I wanted to add that the description on the back looked good, but the last paragraph didn’t give us much hope, if that makes sense. Most of the time in descriptions like that you’ll see something that leaves the reader guessing whether or not something is goi…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle yep, pretty real to me lol

I might try it! If I can find a place to get the song.

@koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @theducktator @grcr @whalekeeper @power @hybridlore

I made some edits on the cover after some of the feedback I got.

@keilah-h

Lol, my characters are pretty real to me, and I guessed yours were to you. lololol.

You should totally try that!

@ellette-giselle The way you talked about Sniper sounds like he’s in the room looking over my shoulder at what I’m typing lolllllll

Which would actually be terrifying for a few reasons. But hey, it’s not like I haven’t also insinuated that my characters actually exist and know what I think of them lol

Anyway, that song is super cool, fits Ro…[Read more]

@keilah-h

I was just listening to Ron’s theme song and I thought you and Sniper would enjoy it. XD

@theducktator

Lol, it’s still in the works. 😉

@the_lost-journal

those are funny. I just did my own because I was in the car and didn’t have access to my quote folder so I did some from my own book because I knew I wouldn’t accidentally misquote them. XD

@hybridlore

lol. Maybe.

Glad it was helpful!

@ellette-giselle

Huh, weird. I didn’t do that intentionally, but it might be because you don’t have an account anymore. 🤷

Thank you so much!!

@hybridlore

Lovely. You disabled copy and paste on the doc. Now I have to do it all the hard way. XD

Okay, feedback answers.

OVERALL

What was your overall impression of the story?

Not sure entirely what you are looking for, but I walked away feeling really excited for the next book and also really refreshed as this is one of my…[Read more]

@koshka

Aw thanks!!!

Would you agree, @power ?

Any suggestions. (besides the odd shapes near his neckline…. which was a reminder for me to clean it up with a brush but I forgot until just now.) and the couple typos already mentioned?

@rae That sounds cool!

@ellette-giselle I don’t know. Either way could work.

@keilah-h

Possibly, or it could be a different insignia altogether depending on the Sector. I;’m not sure yet. What do you think?

Thank you for the cover suggestions!!!!!

Yes, I found a few typos! Whoops, you found one I didn’t.

Good thing you looked. XD

Oh, never mind, you found the typo.

Other than that, the cover looks beautiful.

Also, I have a few suggestions for the back blurb.

• You accidentally wrote “These children are forbidden to form any emotional that might hinder their unwavering loyalty.” Should it be “emotional bond” instead?
• “Jonathan, the second-born” should maybe be something like “Jonathan, a second-born.” But that one can stay in if you really want…

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I already found a typo.

And something wonky is up with his outline…..

@ellette-giselle That looks really good!!

I’m assuming the number changes for each sector.

It reminds me a little bit of the insignias my brother designs for his Icebreaker Empire universe. (He hopes to someday make a video game with a tie-in book series.)