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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
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The seventeenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
March 13th
The EmpireWe are all settled down inside a cave complex the Lord led us to. It has begun to really snow in earnest outside, but we have wood for a fir…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
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With the numbers in their group increased, travel was slower. Still, they pressed on toward the mountains, keeping up a steady pace each day. Four days later they were climbing the foothills and still they continued h…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
I dunno. I like that movie a lot, but it never came to mind while I wrote this scene.
These one sentence time skips aren’t bad, I just have a habit of missing them and then getting confused. Bad habit, that. The whole escape happened so fast and I kept missing things that I had no idea why they were suddenly in the mo…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
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The seventeenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
February 16th
The EmpireLoosing Aelic has been the most heartbreaking thing I have experienced since Adrian’s death. Aelic was such a dear brother, and we all love…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
Whoops. 🫣😂
Good-bye, Aelic
yeah. 😭
There’s a close friend to our family who is very passionate about scripture memorization. He has memorized the entire New Testemant and has made it his goal to encourage others to memorize God’s word. He talks about how we don’t really forget anything, and sometimes, with a little push,…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
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When Leon woke, the light in the shed was very dim. He could hear the sound of voices and pounding and feet hurrying back and forth outside. “I wonder what they’re doing,” he muttered. He began to wonder how the villagers…
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
completely off topic but Bastille is an awesome name for a character. It sounds like a female name, but I guess it could be for a guy too.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
I don’t need no Literary License.
I think so. It’s still early in the book. You could kill them all off and switch to a different character at this point as the protagansit, but that would be really weird as you have already established Leon and Julian as the protagonists.
hmmm.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
For the reason Leon mentioned. Reflexes happening faster than recognition.
Aha. Makes sense.
From this description, first the yelling and banging, then coming down to see everyone else only just standing there, I thought there was a riot outside. So I was surprised to learn that it was only snow and that there had been no…
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
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New chapters on the Part 2 doc!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
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The next morning, Julian woke to the sound of voices and banging. He leapt to his feet and yanked on his boots. Leon was already pulling on his hat and beat him into the other room.
When Julian arrived, he found Marti…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 1 week ago
I think you are pacing this well for a return journey
Phew. Thanks. 😅
Sneaky. But not wise.
why?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 1 week ago
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Leon, Julian, Rolf, Aelic, and Roland remained with Heinrich and Johannes at the University for five days. It was a wonderful time of fellowship and encouragement for them all. The companions would have liked to stay lon…
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whaley replied to the topic Art/Illustration Critique in the forum Art 1 month, 1 week ago
Thanks, dude! I’m using a classical painting for color reference and it’s going surprisingly well. (In a simplified kind of way.)
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 1 week ago
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I don’t think I’ll be able to post today, and if I do it’ll be late this afternoon. I’m going to be busy all day.
Guns.
Yay!!!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 1 week ago
Yes, because some of us are too stoopid to remember.
Oh.
Okay.
Rough as in violent, or rough as in not turning out the way you hoped it would? Guess I will find out.
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… defiantly violent rough, yup.Yeah……. and sad. And Brutal.
I know Hans, but who are these two?
Lieutenant Roth was the man Hans and his compa…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 1 week ago
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Y’all, this book is rough.
The group of soldiers came to a halt in the snowy planes. “We’ll camp here for the night,” came the order.
Hans Schmitz lowered his pack and rolled his aching shoulders. His brothers came and found him from f…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 1 week ago
No prob. I was gone all day yesterday so it gave everyone a chance to catch up.
Who all is with them right now? You have yet to remind us of that.
🤦🏼♀️
It’s the gang, y’all. The same gang from last book. The same gang we left at the end of the last book and are now picking up and the beginning of the next.
Do I really…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 1 week ago
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hopefully this doesn’t feel to fast. The end of this section is where the story really starts to kick back in. We had a lot of travel in the 3rd book, and I’m trying not to literally go back over ground we already covered.
It was a bitterswee…
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month, 1 week ago
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Next two chapters!
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