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whaley replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy – Book II: The Sword in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 weeks, 1 day ago
So when Alan joins The Faithful, and suddenly his behaviour changes (such as his reasons to fight), she is disturbed by this. To her, this kind of looks like he is giving up his independent thinking to some big jerk who thinks he has a right to do whatever he wants with the world.
Ah, there we go! That makes sense. Instead of her…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 weeks, 1 day ago
Also, as for them majority being males, I grew up in a household of boys, and my sister came along when I was already in my teens. Sooo…. boys have always been easy for me to write because I can watch them. I find girls harder because I don’t really live with older girls.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 weeks, 1 day ago
Nice.
ugh!!! Why did I know it would be you who would say that?! 😭
This is a big step for me! I used to only write people my own age or eighteen. Eighteen was the magic year that was always perfect to write. 😂
I have had some older characters…… somewhere……….. I know there were some.
The badguys! I had some…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 weeks, 1 day ago
“If you look at the code before, you will see the two dashes and the arrow indicating the end of a comment. . .”
I’m looking for this, but I can’t find it in the HTML box before the comment you left. I did, however, see this: class=”mt-2″ placeholder=””> –> directly below the comment. Is that what you were referring to?
So if…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy – Book II: The Sword in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 weeks, 1 day ago
@linus-smallprint you’re welcome!
by the way, will we ever see more gorbs? I kinda miss your humorous Australian lizard people. (you somehow struck everything I like with that one lol)
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy – Book II: The Sword in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 weeks, 1 day ago
@linus-smallprint I love that drawing of Tyn! She’s a good balance of humanoid and animal. I like it when authors do that.
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whaley replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy – Book II: The Sword in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 weeks, 1 day ago
So you’re saying she is motivated by independence, realizes this command from the king makes her look controlled, and so tries to justify it through her own moral code to still feel independent? Makes sense. But is something keeping her from switching sides in the first place? (Just digging a little)
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 weeks, 1 day ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint   @koshka  @keilah-h   @elishavet-pidyon  @liberty
NEXT SECTION!!
The sixteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
November 25th
The EmpireTo Wolf, Peter, and the Church in Landstraten,
Greetings in Christ.Our time in the Capital has been one filled with blessings and the grace of God. We have a sm…
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The Ducktator replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy – Book II: The Sword in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 weeks, 1 day ago
Yay!
Spoken like someone who doesn’t get 7 months of winter a year. I would happily swap my weather for yours, but this is the way it is. Oh well.
I used to want to move to Canada so I would get more snow. I’ve decided I’m too loyal to the USA, but I’ll probably live in the mountains at least.
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy – Book II: The Sword in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
@linus-smallprint interesting! So his mother is probably trying to get him to use his magic. Why has she not gone more or less crazy like the other wizards yet? (Or has she and we just haven’t seen that yet.)
Why was she in the form of a crow instead of being half human? Did she use more magic than her husband and son or was it something else?…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy – Book II: The Sword in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
Hip Hip!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
Ah, well farms on the edge of starvation are a little more pliable then you I guess.
That’s kinda cool. Though I usually think of Wolf as a last name.
Oh! Well thanks. I really like the name Wolf for a first name. And Wulf. One’s the German spelling while the other is Saxon.
I think you know already from what I have s…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint   @koshka  @keilah-h   @elishavet-pidyon  @liberty
For anyone who is interested……
The LOS soundtrack!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint   @koshka  @keilah-h   @elishavet-pidyon  @liberty
Face Claim!
Those who’ve read this section will know who this is…….
(answer to one of your questions, Linus.)
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
Hello again!
yeah, I think that’s true. Because you guessed it was Rolf.
Refreshing to see a different reaction here.
Yeah, well it fits his story. This whole section was the completion of his arc. Even though the reader never knows the full story, I like it.
Woah. Lion.
Yeah! A Lion!
No. He’s not lion.
Oh my word! If t…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint   @koshka  @keilah-h   @elishavet-pidyon  @liberty
anyone interested in the playlist I use while I write this?
Liberty, you already have it I think.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint   @koshka  @keilah-h   @elishavet-pidyon  @liberty
SPECIAL NEXT SECTION!!!
I’ll drop a face-claim of a certain key character if y’all want after you read it!
Time passed, and slowly but surely, the church grew. It was wonderful to see how God was working in the lives of the people, and the companions…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
Yes, that’s how to pronounce it, but it would be said with a thick German accent, not our American one, so it would sound a little different. It could also be said Helen with the “e” still added.
Oh, come on! Adrian wasn’t always dead. I would like to know what he was like when he was alive on earth.
Shy. Rather a bit of a coward s…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint   @koshka  @keilah-h   @elishavet-pidyon  @liberty
SPECIAL NEXT SECTION!!! Part 2 of today!!!
The sixteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
October 27th Â
The EmpireWe spent all day today going up and down the streets. We mostly explored our surroundings, though we did talk with a few of the peo…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint   @koshka  @keilah-h   @elishavet-pidyon  @liberty
NEXT SECTION!!!
The sixteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
        October 7th
        The EmpireAs you will see by yesterday’s entries, I have returned to the Empire. It took all of yesterday to chronicle everything that happened to Ro…
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