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The Ducktator replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
I didn’t have a problem with the magic images. Since this is fiction, I don’t think readers will attempt to do the magic, since it is evil, and unless the images are actually based on occult magic, I don’t see any harm with the reader picturing them.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
Woah! You hit me with a lot. *goes and re-reads sections to see where you are*
Okay.
When Amelia started feeling unwell, I kind of suspected she might be pregnant.
Yeesh! It looks like we were wrong.
Okay, why is that? Was it just because that seemed logical, or because you thought I was above killing a girl, (I’ll have you…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
Okay, to me it wasn’t so much that the images were real/unreal/creepy/cute/etc.etc. That’s not what matters to me. what matters is letting the reader picture what Alan is picturing when that thing is sinful. I mean…. ugh….. how to put this……… okay, one thing is that if there is any book that we are reading and the…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
*screams* he’s back!
I just meant the look on his face. lol.
Oh cool! I will be saving that one into my collection!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @grcr
OKAY!
Well, thank you very much to any of y’all who survived all the way to the end. I’m excited to hear y’alls thoughts and I’m looking forward to lost of feedback. Here are some questions that I had. (I may have looked at your file for some question st…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
Woah! You’re signature quote! I love it! Do you know who said that, or is the author unknown?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @grcr
The hours passed, but there was little dread in them for Joseph. Beric slept most of the time, and when Joseph laid a hand against the boy’s forehead, he found it was still hot with fever. His own eyes burned, and he was sure Stephen was little better.
Afte…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @grcr
well, it’s 2025, but I have one section left to post, so I think I kinda did it….. in a kinda didn’t way. lolololol.
Keep an eye out as I shall be posting THE END of TVON today!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @grcr
12/31/24
NEXT SECTION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
The next morning, Joseph was startled awake by the sound of keys jangling in the lock. He sat up quickly, jolting Amelia awake.
Beric rolled over and yawned.
At the other side of the room, David was a…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 3 months ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @grcr
12/30/24
NEXT SECTION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
(it’s loonnnggggeee)
“Would you pass the bread?” Stephen asked.
Joseph handed it to him, and Stephen cut a slice. “Amelia, this is truly an amazing supper.”
“It sure is,” Joseph agreed.
Amelia smiled…
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Liberty replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 4 months ago
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Sorry, the post didn’t tag you! Just read the post above for the prompt!
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Liberty replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 4 months ago
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Some people…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
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12/28/24
Section 1.
(hopefully that will make it easier for anyone behind to organize these parts.) 😉
if this section was too long, then I can cut them down. Just let me know.
NEXT SECTION
The next morning, Joseph awoke to the banging of the back do…
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The Ducktator replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
Happy Belated Birthday! 🎂🎊🎈
Thank you!
I have finished the book. I was tearing up at the end. Charles was one of my favorites. I still haven’t given up hope that he will be saved in the next book, even though I know he won’t. That hymn was so beautiful and definitely fitting. I’ll try to get to the questions soon, but it…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
@linus-smallprint lol that raccoon
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
You’re very welcome.
Also, why does that racoon picture have an expression that so fits what I know of you? lolololol.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
I have the same thought as Hybrid here. Beric has not only been independent for a while now, but he is also a teen. I’m glad you included the scene of his struggle to listen.
Thanks. It actually wasn’t in the first or second draft. I had a reference made to it in the third, but I thought I should flush it out into a full s…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
Sounds good!
I’ll see if I can get at least one of your new sections done today.
Wonderful!! Thanks! Looking forward to it!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
Also, what about Andrew Peterson’s Carry the Fire? We both agreed on that one.
Okay yeah, we did. That one is a great song.
Oh, looks like you mentioned the editor question. Ignore my second offer. I thought you might have missed it.Glad you found a good person for the job!
😉
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
I don’t know how to send doc. links. so, here are my answers.
The Narrow Path Trilogy: Book One – The Cost Feedback Questions
Character
~ Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?
Alan. Because he was the redemption character, and I LOVE redemption characters. If you look at my…[Read more]
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