Linus Smallprint

@linus-smallprint I’m a little late to the party, but I’ll help!

@linus-smallprint

I’ve been taking a swing at these documents.

Left several comments for you.

@linus-smallprint

Oh, so you did actually make them stay. But you’re zooming through this as well in order not to interfere with the pacing. That works.

Phew, glad it works. XD

I’m glad for this scene. Before I read this section, I was hoping your next section would have something like it. We’ve had many scenes of preaching the gospel, peopl…

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NEXT SECTION!!!

Imperial Winters are not very exciting, so I’m going to try to cover the whole time in this next section. We’ll see if I can pull it off.

The fifteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
December 2nd
The Empire

Early this morning, I wa…

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@linus-smallprint

Wow, your depiction of her personality was really cool to read. I hadn’t even thought about all those things together like that–like how she pauses to consider different things–but you have a good point.

Awesome, thank you!! I’m glad it doesn’t seem to be too much for you guys.

@linus-smallprint

Well, thank you for venturing into new grounds! This does help freshen up this story from the others.

Thanks! That’s the goal!

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NEXT SECTION!!!

The day passed, and the five young men explored the town. Everyone seemed to be very busy, and no one was interested in talking with them. So, the five decided to scout out the town and see what it was like. As Roland had said, the town wa…

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@hybridlore

First off,  @whalekeeper had an amazing suggestion for Cole and Sara! Love that!

Second, I like the synesthesia. It’s interesting and I don’t really know much about it so I feel like i’m uncovering something new as I read. I may be the odd number on this, but I personally enjoy it.

how about you, @linus-smallprint ?

@whalekeeper

Awesome!! Sorry I stopped tagging you, I didn’t know if you were still reading.

Thank you so much for the feedback! Making the world relatable was one of my big focuses, because I didn’t want it to just be this unrealistic cliche dystopian. I wanted the reader to be able to see why the government was this way, and for the gra…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

WYOH!!!!! NO! Bad creature! Go away!

Ugh. let’s try this again.

Why is Julian asking this question when he is also documenting event is his own journal?

because for one, Julian has a bit of an argumentative mentality. For two, he views it as more of a past time whereas Leon wants it to be a very orderly account and…[Read more]

@hybridlore

So you thinking he’s gonna be your fav?

Oh fun! I’ll hunt you up when I feel like getting in an argument. XD XD

@linus-smallprint

yes, you did call it.

How loyal are these people to thier gods? From this, I would guess that they wouldn’t be willing to die for them.

Not many Romans (or people who shared such a culture) were. T…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Pronounced the same as Alec?

I was saying it “ay-lec” in my head, but I don’t know if that’s accurate.

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, it gave me very . . . Socratic-discussion vibes. But it was great. That’s funny, I also like to debate… slightly lol. It’s a little stressful.

I don’t know, I just like him. He’s funny and impulsive (li…[Read more]

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The next morning, the four sat about the campfire and discussed their next course of action.

“So, where to now?” Roland asked.

Leon rolled up his cloak and pushed it into his rucksack. “I say we keep pushing toward the Capital and s…

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NEXT SECTION!!!

Sorry I’m late. Busy today. But, I think it’s a little longer than normal. 🙂

“Thank you so much for the meal, Liesl. It was wonderful,” Julian said.

Liesl smiled. “I’m glad you liked it.”

“So, what are we doing today?” Roland asked. A…

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Chapter 11! I’m not totally decided if I’ll completely reduce down to one a week in the future, so you may get a few surprise double chapters, but this week there’s only one.

Also, TCoH has become my longest project at just over 33k words and about 100 W…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Yay for spring and positive temperatures! But I’m sure somewhere in Canada there’s still snow on the ground. 😉

Outlining, fun. Or not fun. I hope it goes well.

@linus-smallprint

Oh, I get it. I thought Quinton was the name.

Okay….. hmm. This’ll be interesting. Your grandmother is a woman of good taste when it comes to names if I do say so myself.

If Kleins and Roland aren’t important to the story anymore, spending too much time with them may only make the reader disappointed when they are left b…

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@linus-smallprint

Uh…. not really. It’s kind of a mess.

So wait, how many brothers are there. I got Julian, Roland, Adrian, and Quinton, (almost because I had a Quin)

Are there two or three more?

I was kind of surprised that Leon and Julian are headed out since for both of the previous books, the protagonists just ended up staying with…

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HELLO EVERYONE!!!! I’M BACK!!!!!!!!

I survived– barely, and am well and alive– sort of.

(Came down with a nasty cold the minute I got home. Ugh.)

Anyhow, it’s so good to be back!! I have the next section, and I may post another today as well. I hav…[Read more]

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😊