Linus Smallprint

@hybridlore

Yeah that’s what i was thinking too! That’s too bad, I bet she’s disappointed (if that’s the reason). I’m gonna miss her!

@rae

Those are really cool!

@acancello @mineralizedwritings @trailblazer @grcr @rae @esther-c

Do you guys want me to make them all transfer to the other world Rae was talking about?

Or does someone else want to? I’m fine with either XD

@acancello

then pulled Ottoline close to him and together they watched the stars inch across the sky.

That is so good!!!

@esther-c

Wow, that’s so cool!

I wish I could come up with plot twists like that XD

@thearcaneaxiom

I like it! She reminds me of EVE from the movie WALL-E, lol

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom

That is the way of writers🤣 Your characters feel real to you. Frank Herbert’s son felt like he had to compete with his father’s characters for love and attention, so it is a very real thing that influences our world. (Sorry if I just made that a little depressing at the end, his son happily continues his father’s legac…

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@janellebelovedpig

I miss her already

@thearcaneaxiom

That’s fair. If it feels natural to you, than I’d say leave it, as long as it isn’t creating weird jarring breaks that throw the reader out of the story, which I don’t think it is, except for here:

You’re telling me.

Where I had to pause for a moment and reread it. I’m still not sure if I understand this line 😂…[Read more]

@jonas

You might not care, but I try to maintain a fairly equal ratio of male MCs to female MCs in a book. This shouldn’t be the deciding factor, but consider that adding Liv as a MC would give you a 2 to 4 ratio (double the amount of female characters to male), whereas you currently have as even a ratio as possible with 2 to 3.

Obviously, you m…

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@freedomwriter76

Oof, sounds pretty sad to me…poor siblings 🥺 (sounds pretty angsty XD)

From what I’ve read, your book seems really interesting!! 💕🤩

Well that scene was from an old story, which gave me the idea to write my current WIP based off of that. So it didn’t make it through editing, neither did most of that very sloppy 41K very rough “dr…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Sure. Let’s see…here, I found this paragraph especially confusing:

You’re telling me. I had more questions, but held my tongue because Thing’s current track record hasn’t been the most helpful for answering them, other than explaining my inability to eat.

And there were a couple other spots where it switches to present tense lik…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Just popping in, I know I haven’t been very active on here…

Is 6 MC’s too many, or should I stick with my original 5?

It really depends. If Liv is going to be important enough to be an MC and if you can make each of their viewpoints interesting and make every character unique, I’d say go for it. I know GodlyFantasy has, li…[Read more]

@jonas

I would say it completely depends on relevance to the main plot. Is she going to have future interactions with the main cast? Will her actions have an impact on the overall story? If not, then I would say it would be best not to, but there is another option.

Yeah, she’s going to play a part in the story.

That makes sense, I’ll experiment I…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Only read this if you want too…but look how outdated the style is!!! I can’t believe I used to write like this, and that was just last year! CRINGE. This is one of the only scenes that I teared up during…and i still don’t really get why. It’s not that good tbh…

Jorryn

After what seems like at least a million more steps…

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@freedomwriter76

made me cry so many times writing it tho! XD

I haven’t actually cried while writing any stories (though I have a feeling that my current WIP will do it sometime soon as it deals with abuse, romance, and evil in general and some parts are sad!).  I once wrote a sad chapter last spring for a school assignment about this boy who was…[Read more]

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom

Hey, it’s me again, lol. I have a question. Is it fine to give a side character a POV if it’s for one or two chapters?

Here’s some context. If you guys remember Liv from chapter 5 (where Lilitu steals bread), I was thinking she could play a part in Lilitu’s story. She’s kind of secretly supporting the Paynes and I wanted…[Read more]

@acancello

I should have the next scene done by tomorrow for the RP 🙂

Oooh I’m excited! I’ll wait to write mine until you post it, because I don’t want to accidentally have the same idea, lol. (And I RP way too much on here, lol)

@janellebelovedpig

AHHH! I think Sarafini left us! NOOOO! All her posts say anonymous and I can’t see her profile 🙁