Linus Smallprint

@linus-smallprint

Alan, must you do something stupid????😩

@ellette-giselle

Just met the second crow, but I’m pausing to call something.

I think it’s his mother.

Maybe.

Ooh, good theory.

@stephie

Seriously, that gave me the ugh-the-main-character-is-doing-something-stupid sinking feeling in my stomach

Same.

@elishavet-pidyon

*erupts from snow fort*

Hey that’s a good idea. I need a snow fort. *rubs hands with evil intent*

@whalekeeper

Barnes… I’ll join you buddy

Kidding, I’m kidding, slightly

@rae YAY!

@jonas @loopylin @rae

Ben Gunn and Flare – Rooftop gang

“Stay down you dirty bird,” Ben said as the last guard fell to the ground. He looked around, “Where did Felic… oh, whatever her name is go?”

“I don’t know,” Flare was panting, “I told them that they should leave to keep the kid safe.”

Ben nodded, “Makes sense. Should we try to find her?”

@the_lost-journal

I haven’t had time to read through everything, but I’m still interested in doing this. I’m not sure if I will be able to vote before 10pm, but I should have time tomorrow.

@whalekeeper

All I know of Barnes is from the Character Castle, and I really want to know the context of that last meme.😂

@keilah-h

friggin’ = fridge (the appliance that you put food in to make it cold) + in’ (to make it a verb)

@linus-smallprint

lol. Poor Joseph. It must have been awful for him.

ah yes. Eric is very proud of himself.
good. Good! I’m so glad this scene works well! “touch down Tulip!!” (Storks if you haven’t scene the movie that quite come from)
 

I’m surprised there was no comment on the Julian/Joseph conversation.
was it good? Does it fit?

@linus-smallprint

that’s what (frustratingly) keeps me from being able to say this scene doesn’t work.

I don’t like you at all.

yes! Yes it does make sense, and I hate that I’m saying it, but it fits.

I doubly don’t like you.

I also agree that the interactions seem very stiff or formal, but I wasn’t sure if that’s what you’re going for.

@koshka

Rory

“How’re you holding up”

Rory glanced over at Leo. “I’m okay.”

Leo nodded and continued on.
Rory glanced back at the school. He felt a crawling sensation along his spine. As if… as if someone was watching them.
Rory evened his pace so it would match Leo’s steps. He came alongside the older boy. “I think someone’s followi…[Read more]

@loopylin Alright, sounds good 👍

@hybridlore

Thank you!

Cute scene between Joseph and Julian? Hmm, not exactly the word I would have gone for…… lol. I think I get what you mean tho.

Ah. I use the name Jesus a lot in my writing. It’s a name with power.

@the_lost-journal

You’re not kicked. You just haven’t RPd so most people guessed you dropped out.

Plus, the boat crew, (which I think you’re characters are with) has done nothing for quiet some time because we’re trying to connect the other groups to them in order to have a little conference and figure out what on earth is…[Read more]

@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @grcr

Okay, I made the suggested changes to the last couple of sections, and I’m working on some more Joseph/Amelia interactions. I thought I’d just go ahead and post the next scene while I take care of the other stuff.

NEXT SECTION

After Leon and Julian left…

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@jonas @loopylin @rae

Ben Gunn and Flare – Elderstrand, Rooftop team

Ben and Flare looked at each other, Flare nodded. Ben gave a shout, “Tallyho!” Both leaped from the roof into the crowded street. Ben rushed to the last guard; their swords clashed with sparks.

Flare ran to the girl, “How are you lass? Hold still while I just…” *clank* F…[Read more]

@koshka

Quincy was flopped on his back wriggling under a bush. Leo extracted him, taking a moment to brush him off before slinging him over his shoulder.

Best mental picture ever! XD

Rory

Rory looked up at Leo. “Go where? where can we go?” Panic was rising in his chest, but he swallowed it down. He took Leo’s hand and let the young man…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Oh my goodness!

He’s so cool In almost a…. hmmm….. not quite creepy….. maybe, in a shivery way. lol.

He’s very cool and very eye catching. Quite the interesting picture! I like it!

@rae

I know that was rash of Baron, but he’s a soloest so he doesn’t understand teamwork

See, this is what Leon was thinking when he was worried about Baron joining their team.

@liberty

I’m so glad you like it.

Yes, Marta was alright. lol.