Linus Smallprint

@ellette-giselle

Aaron walked over and picked up a brown hat made of corse fabric. It was a traditional working class cap, and Aaron had seen a few Ardentans were them.

I am curious what this hat looks like. Is this one of those flat hats, with a brim that goes over the eyes?

Oh Father, please give us hope, give us light in this darkness, water in…

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@ellette-giselle

I’m only a little bit eager for you to read this because as soon as you are done I can send it to me editor……. no pressure

Ah, Okay.

Do you want me to tag you again if you have not responded by Thursday, in case for some reason you don’t get the first tag?

Sure. Just give me until the evening Alberta time before you send a reminder please.

@ellette-giselle

That’s it? I wait for four days to get a response from anyone and I get one sentence! I am affronted! lol. XD

Yeah, this is a mix of me being busy/kingdom pen not letting me know that you have posted new stuff despite the fact you properly included my tag. Sorry.

If you post tomorrow, please know I may not comment on it until T…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Well, that’s one way to get a job. I feared at first that the three guys were all being conscripted and sent off to war.

@ellette-giselle

So do you think him calling an end to the meeting that day was wrong?

No. Aaron did not decide on more church services period. But I know the characters are going to try to hold another church service, and this was a possible solution that occurred to me for how they could continue to hold services with minimum conflict. If you…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Well, there is the older of my two sisters, who was into writing long before me. So that makes two.

@ellette-giselle

I almost wrote a fake scene where he did, just to see how you would react. But I didn’t have time. XD

Wow… I know it is the job of authors to torcher their readers, but that is mean.

Did it not come across that way?

Not really, sorry. I was under the impression that he had already accepted that he was staying in

It was hard, b…

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What’s it with all these readers being eldest siblings? I should go check again with my siblings to see what they think of Martha. (My brother will probably try to tell me his suffering as the youngest is much worse, but whatever. I could maybe show some of his frustrations in Eric, even if Eric is not the youngest.)

@ellette-giselle

Okay, I was right. Aaron did not leave Sabina (good lad). If you want it to be harder for the reader to see what is coming, Aaron will need to miss his family more and long to return to his homeland earlier on.

@theducktator

Oh yeah! Tyn does not like doing dishes, so Alan could be her hero, cleaning up after she finishes cooking something.

@ellette-giselle

Where is my nagging deadline?

See my previous post.

I listened to your soundtrack suggestions, thank you for sharing them. Here are my thoughts.

Alan theme: Looking at the lyrics for this, this does not quite work for him. However, there is another character that this is almost a perfect fit for. I think the lyrics of this work…[Read more]

@stephie

I’ve read everything up until now and am patiently (read: impatiently) awaiting the next chapter.

I am aiming to release this by the 21st. Realised for the first part of the chapter I still needed to figure something out, but I am close to coming up with a solution, so I should be able to start working on in soon amid my assignments.

@keilah-h

Thank you for mentioning that. I see your confusion. I might use Furr, since I don’t think I have used that as a name in this story. I also may add a sassy note from the narrator that will be something like the following:

(No, not Nehss as in the soldier we met earlier, this is a different Nesss. While spelling varies, it is a very…

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@theducktator

Are you the eldest child? (The reason I ask is that some of Martha’s frustrations come from me being the eldest child, and I am wondering if people who are not eldest children also find her relatable.)

Also, it sounds like you have read everything I have posted so far. I take it you do much to say, but I am curious to know what…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Yes, I am also the eldest sibling.

@theducktator

Thank you for the description! I will get to this if I have time.

@ellette-giselle

yes, this fixes everything.

Good

Considering that I have only scene you talk about younger brothers and that you found Martha relatable, I guess yes, you are the eldest.

@mineralizedwritings

Well, now you’ve learned a little more about describing characters and how that impacts how your reader imagines them!

@stephie

How far are you into the story?

@keilah-h

Ah good. Someone relates to Eric.

You should give a glossary of Rorian words at the end or something! It might help the jokes stick better. The explanations actually make it funnier than the jokes would be alone, but I still feel like something’s missing. I like it though, don’t remove it.…

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