Linus Smallprint

@whalekeeper

Nice memes!

My favourite is the Dipper/Alan one about the Aphid repellant.

@ellette-giselle

Thank you very much for the feedback! I will get to reading through it later.

@whalekeeper

I think she’s really fun, but I’ll talk about it in the long feedback post. 😊

@ellette-giselle

Good section! I was going to say, it seems weird that Beric would change so quickly, but now I see he’s still going to struggle.

I have the same thought as Hybrid here. Beric has not only been independent for a while now, but he is also a teen. I’m glad you included the scene of his struggle to listen.

The soup began to hiss, so A…

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@ellette-giselle

We’ll see if this works, but I have decided randomly and impulsively that I will have this whole book posted on here by the end of the year.

Expect big sections in the time to come.

However, if I’m going to get this done it means that those of y’all who do make comments will have bigger sections to comment on. If that’s too dif…

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@theducktator

Happy Belated Birthday! 🎂🎊🎈

I’d give you cake, but that would be a lie, and then I’d end up being sued by GLaDOS, and that is a fight I can’t win, so sorry. I hope you had a good birthday though!

Also, question, do you read the discussion questions in the backs of books normally? I always ignore them.😅

I sometimes read them out of…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Now THAT might have just been your best chapter ever. I could feel Alan, I could sense that he was completely trust the Saviour, yet there was also pain with it, but his grief was quiet by now. If you could make the grief in the chapter before this more forceful then it would beautiful contrast to the calm in this one.

Thank you!…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

I’m a third of the way through and I already have a lot of thoughts, so that’s good! I really like Tyn, by the way, favorite character.

Glad to hear! Tyn was a character I didn’t like much in the first draft and I was considering changing her a lot until I got near the end of it and she went through some really interesting cha…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

This will answer your question about the feedback I’m looking for.

@ellette-giselle @theducktator @keilah-h @stephie @loopylin @theshadow

I made up a feedback file with questions I would like you to answer about my book. Do you have to? No. I understand if it’s too much and if you don’t have enough time, but I would really…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

I think it is high time I read through everything, that way you get a perspective from someone who doesn’t have to wait for each section and reads it in roughly a couple sittings. 👍

Awesome!

@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow @whalekeeper

Here is the discussion guide. It’s rought right now. It was inspired by the discussion guides at the end of the second edition books for The Wingfeather Saga. However, I think that’s resulted in it being written for a younger audience than my book is aimed at (I’m…[Read more]

@keilah-h

I don’t know if Boxing Day is widely celebrated in America, but it is at the very least on our calendars.

Ah, okay. It’s pretty much like a second Black Friday here.

@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow @whalekeeper

End credits song! (This was the most fitting version of this song I could find. As an aside, if you haven’t, look up the history of this song.)

@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow @whalekeeper

Happy Boxing Day! (do you celebrate this in the USA?) Let’s box this draft up with the final chapter!

Chapter the 34th – The Choice

There is one more thing I need to write for this that I will do later. A discussion guide for the reader. After that I will have…[Read more]

@keilah-h @stephie

(also, how come humans aren’t a little more upset that lyens seem to think they’re the dominant species? Is there a human-centric country or are they just all over without a specific homeland?) 

Yes, the humans are upset, this just hasn’t been the focus of the story, and with other things to focus on, such as getting rid of the…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Yeah, but do they have plans to take over the solar system as well?

Sun == Warm Canada

Mercury == Lesser Canada

Venus == Poisonus Canada

Earth == Canada Major

Mars == Red Canada

Astroid Belt == Floaty Canada

Jupiter == Stormy Canada

Saturn == Ring Canada

Neptune == Blue Canada

Uranass == Canadass

Pluto == Canada that is…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Haven’t seen it, and didn’t have any plans yet. When my brother saw the trailer, he reported the protagonist was a Mary Sue, which turned our family off. But now you’ve peeked my curiosity. I didn’t realize Peter Jackson was directing it.

@stephie

Eek I ranted sorry.

No worries. I rant all the time, just ask @ellette-giselle.

Thank you both for your feedback on the emotional scene. Heh heh. Maybe one day I will learn how to make my characters emotional, but your advice will help me, thanks for it. Where would the both of you say the emotion fell off in the chapter? Was it around…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Do the races of Ehverwyld have a Christmas equivalent?

Possibly? The only holiday I have figured out for Klaw is Arsakora Day, which is a lyenized kentor holiday in spring to celebrate trees. (It was talked about in Chapter the 12th – The Memory). I know they have some winter holiday, but it could be very similar or very different to our…[Read more]

@liberty

I haven’t actually participated in any of these yet, so don’t worry about me too much. But I am more likely to participate in this if it runs in the new year to keep writing while I take a break between drafts.